Watershed Dream

A little somethin somethin

Say something sweet to me
when you say my name
Breathe in my essence
Decipher the pain

 

Staring into the depths
of a watershed dream
Washed into distance
then repairing the seam

 

Broken and twisted
Blackened and blistered
Becoming ballistic
Hides everyone's shame

 

Retired repugnant
Blackened and blistered
Buried and festered
Hearts echoing blame

Author's Note

OH i dont know, be constructive, punctuation is witheld

Reviews

[THE LOST ROSE]

Constructive huh? Okay I love this piece. Your word combination is incredible. I can see this poem written a few different ways but unless it is written like this it could easliy go unnotice. Not this version, WOW great write.

[Loretta]

You definitely have a knack for unique rhymes. The rhyming doesn't sound too forced, which is a hard thing to accomplish. Great rhythm! I liked the third stanza the best. The off-rhyming was fantastic.

[Jessica M.]

"decipher the pain"
amazing line, i like the concept that pain actually need to be understood.
the repetition of "blackened and blistered"
gives the poem a nice rhythm too.
nice beat,
nice write.