Don't Presume to Understand Me

Don't Presume to Understand Me

A Poem by Robert Erickson
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Ever feel like someone is just filling in the blanks about the things you don't know how to explain? Apparently, it pisses me off. But what doesn't piss me off these days...

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Don't presume to understand me.

My journey for identity

lies in a continious state of beginning.

 

How dare you presume to understand me?

You only perceive what words

I choose to emit externally.

 

When you dare to presume to understand me

anger and frustration explode

from the fountain of my personal being.

 

Even when you dare to presume to understand me

my quest for fulfillment doesn't end.

My process for identification does not prosper from your over analytical nonsense.

 

The moment when you dare to presume to understand me

is only wasted amongst a million mediocre moments

daring you to continue your arbitrary transient meaningless exhistance.

 

Why would you waste one moment when you dare to presume to understand me

when I've explained how fruitless your labor will be,

when I've given no applause, no patent for a successful endeavor.

 

Listen,

don't presume to understand me.

Got it?

 

Good.

© 2008 Robert Erickson


Author's Note

Robert Erickson
constructive criticism please

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Wow, I can completely relate to this! It's very accurate.
"Continious" is spelled "continuous". I'm just a grammar/mechanics freak. Unless it was intended, you keep repeating the words "presume", "understand", and "me". I like how it starts short and gets longer and longer (climax?) and ends with one word. Good :)
The second verse is inevitable, though. People can only judge with what you give them.
Sorry, I'm not really a poem person, so I can't give you the constructive criticism you're looking for. I tried, though. Oh, and in the fifth "paragraph", existance is spelled wrong. You seem to overuse adjective a bit; maybe give some more imagery instead? Like, use literary devices, such as metaphors, similes, and personification. Compare this feeling to something, make it -alive-. You're stating the facts more than showing us. But it's good nonetheless.
Good job =) Hope you get the constructive crit that you're lookin' for.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Advice and assumptions and labels are sometimes sent ur way with such arrogance that it definitely is a matter to get pissed off about.

Nice read.

Thank you for joining the contest.

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Posted 15 Years Ago


Wow, I can completely relate to this! It's very accurate.
"Continious" is spelled "continuous". I'm just a grammar/mechanics freak. Unless it was intended, you keep repeating the words "presume", "understand", and "me". I like how it starts short and gets longer and longer (climax?) and ends with one word. Good :)
The second verse is inevitable, though. People can only judge with what you give them.
Sorry, I'm not really a poem person, so I can't give you the constructive criticism you're looking for. I tried, though. Oh, and in the fifth "paragraph", existance is spelled wrong. You seem to overuse adjective a bit; maybe give some more imagery instead? Like, use literary devices, such as metaphors, similes, and personification. Compare this feeling to something, make it -alive-. You're stating the facts more than showing us. But it's good nonetheless.
Good job =) Hope you get the constructive crit that you're lookin' for.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Robert Erickson
Robert Erickson

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Undiscovered poet. I know entirely too much about computers... I like to read and watch documentaries and learn stuff and I'm a programmer. more..

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