Silent, I wish

Some people are more than what they seem...

I wish you could see,

behind the lies,

at what truely lives,

behind my eyes.

The happy girl,

you see so clear,

silently screams,

behind invisible tears.

I smile and laugh,

when people can see,

but sit and weep,

when it's just me.

I wish you could see,

behind my mask,

I wish that someone,

would just come out and ask.

Ask me for the truth,

the story with no lies,

tell me it's o.k.,

that you'll stand by my side.

So much dark pain,

swims in my heart.

The road so blurry,

I can't see where to start.

I wish you could see,

past my smile, so mild,

look deep in my heart,

and see the lost child.

I'm wrapped in fear,

and my body is so sick,

I want to break free

of these chains, so thick.

"But I can't!" I say,

"Not all alone,

I need a friend to help me,

get past this milestone."

Author's Note

Thank you for reading the poem. Tis one of my favourites. :) So a reply is needed and thanked. :) :) :) :)

Reviews

[Maria C. Donado]

Bloody COW. This is so deep. It made my heart wrench a little, not even kidding, really nice use of words.

[pal]

Very nice indeed. True all need this. Some one to just there along our travel through life. Just to give us missed strokes that all need.

pal

[Michael Lopez]

you need to put a "n" in friend at the end....

oh yeah nice job.

[Dawning Creativeness]

All the review's below sum up what I'm going to say. Brilliant. Something that has troubled every teenager or adult and very easy to relate too. Great job. =]

[Fran Marie]

The happy girl,

you see so clear,

silently screams,

behind invisible tears.



I can feel the pain within these lines~ some just can't see
what is beyond the smiles and invisible tears

This is very well expressed with vivid descriptives and good rhyme scheme

[xlynne]

this was a very great poem! something thats easy to connect and identify with. the second to the last line you forgot the n in friend. the rhymes added a nice touch, it's good that you went with them. my favorite part in your poem was when you said: I'm wrapped in fear/and my body is so sick/I want to break free/of these chains, so thick.
that was a great set of lines. the sick part just really captured me and made me envision this who is simply tired of pretending and wish someone could just help her.
again superb write!

[Sarah]

SLDKFJSLD. You, my friend, are amazing. Your rhyming was superb and never sounded awkward anywhere. :) I'm impressed. I love the title. This poem, despite covering a topic that's been done a hundred times, manages to be fresh and unique. I loved it - nice job!

[Garrett Beebe]

This is a very true poem of lots of people, I know I have met many people who are happy on the outside but if you really get to know them you see their troubles as bright as day. This reminds me of the girl that I wrote my poem "I Once Knew a Girl..." about, very tragic, you might like it however.

[Janice Ann]

I loved this. Reality is harsh huh? People do not really realize that the happy smiles leads to a pretty sad soul sometimes...but we all are capable of living through it and making it easier to shine...I enjoyed the realness of this piece...it is very well done!

Thanks!
Janice

[Jaffa Forbes]

This is nice, and that's saying something... I don't usually go for structured rhyming poems. But you've done this really well. It has a stong content throughout that is also quite engaging. All very true.
Jaff