A tree whispered to me today

A tree I had known for

all of my life whispered to me today.

I had just wanted some simple shade

in a quiet area full of peace

to relax in.

I could feel the heat of the sun,

and the pressures of the day

fade as I walked into the shade.

I sat against the tree.

I could feel the hard and rough bark

budging into my back as I leaned up

against it more and more.

The soft green grass covered the ground.

The wind slowly began to blow.

And then I heard a voice.

An old, crackly voice.

It spoke to me.

 

It said,

          "Oh, how I love this area.

          So many people have sat under

          me hoping to get cooler.  Hoping

          to escape this crazy world.  I love

          this spot.  It is so beuatiful and

          relaxing.  The ground in which I so

          lovingly sit upon each day and night.

          is so soft and nice.  The grass

          couldn't be anymore greener and

          the skies coulndn't be anymore bluer.

          You are one of those people.  I am

          glad to see that I am still useful.  Tell

          the world that I said thank you."

 

 

 

 

I speak no lie to you!

The tree I have seen and used everyday

really talked to me.

It talked to me with beauitful words

of wisdom that floated in my head

for hours after.

So I will do as it asked,

"Thank you world."

Author's Note

Please leave a review, even if you don't put much! Please and thank you!
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Reviews

[Moi]

I agree with Mr. Gray. This poem does seem rather rushed. Also, your words seemed a little redundant. I don't mind the tree's speach, though punctuation and capitalization seemed off (nitpicking, but it helps the reader follow along if you'd clean that up). However, I thought that using shade twice within the first stanza wasn't helping this poem.

Also, if you could explain what "one of those people" means. Does the tree talk to all of those people? Or has it only spoken to you? Or perhaps that's supposed to be a mystery.

All in all, I liked the idea. You will no doubt perfect this till it shines, so I have no worries.

[Sarah]

This is really nice - an ode to nature, that it's still useful and beautiful even in a world where we don't appreciate it as much as we used to, which is sad in itself. =/ Great job!

[Staci Brown]

you know you really should sit down and write a story...

this is a really kewl idea. i loved the mighty Entwood talking to you! you reminded me of my youth with this poem where i grew up... where i live now is so different... no trees of shade to rest under anymore...

Faerie Blessings!

--faerie whisper (breaking the silence...)

[Nova]

This was short but sweet. I really liked it. The idea especially. It reminds me of Shel Silversteins book 'The Giving Tree'

[Fabian G. Franklin]

This was very nice. Tell the tree to watch out for crazies with chainsaws. lol

[Jessica Fox]

This was a beautiful and serene piece

[Damian Alan Gray]

You're onto a good idea with this poem, but it seems a bit rushed. There are also some grammatical and spelling issues, but I'll leave those in my notes. Overall, however, it's a nice poem that evokes a feeling of peace.