Note this, my love

Sadness is in this one, and so is a poetic touch. How would you say this..."We are not meant to be", but in a nice way though? Here is how I would.

Note this, my love,

your love is strong,

and so is mine.

 

Note this my love,

I will not leave you,

or your love behind.

 

Note this my love,

your grasp for my heart,

is frail now and shrinks.

 

Note this my love,

my life needs not you,

and my love has kinks.

 

Note this my love,

a leter of sorrow,

will be yours.

 

Note this my love,

a pitiful pain in me,

is nothingbut scorned.

 

Note this my love,

my memory of you,

will be a part of me.

 

 

 

 

Note this, my friend,

I love you, I do,

but the way you see.

 

Note this my friend,

your love is strong,

but mine is not.

 

Note this my friend,

our hearts will meet and fall so,

and bleed and clot.

 

Note this my friend,

hate me, you might,

but not for long.

 

Note this my friend,

love is evil, not good,

and we have heard its song.

 

Note this my friend,

we are only friends,

only friends.

 

Note this my friend,

I wl have a faint love,

for you, 'till the end.

Author's Note

Tell me what you think. Please and thank you!

Reviews

[Sarah]

I really, really enjoyed this. The repetition changing from "love" to "friend" was excellent and each stanza flowed really well! I particularly enjoyed "Note this my friend, / your love is strong, / but mine is not." & my personal favorite: "Note this my friend, / we are only friends, / only friends." I love the way that stanza was written - almost as though you were attempting to convince both yourself & the other person that you're only friends. (: This piece definitely surprised me, I really enjoyed it, great job!!! =)

[Tony]

This is a nice description of the uncomfortable event in which one has to be frank with another in a matter of the heart.
How sad it is to have to break a heart.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

i love the form and message of this, the repetition did not distract from the charm but just pushed and pushed the point across, great job on this but it needs some proof reading, check out that last stanza. relationships and love get confused in fun and sex sometimes or killed in the lack thereof.

[Nova]

Wow, that poem pretty much sums it all up. It wasn't harsh like a break up would be I thought it was actually quite sweet in a sad but happy way...anyways it was excellant.