Large Thoughts, Large Dreams

An uneducated boy in the year 1833, speaks about his large thoughts, and large dreams. (A Haiku)

I got some big dreams.

Yeah, large thoughts, lrge dreams, that's me.

Got a big head too.

 

My big ol' head is

useful and helps hold in all

those big thoughts and dreams.

 

Someday, on dis eart,

peoples gonna fly and sour

and rockets up high.

 

Readin' ain't my thing.

Needa is school or learnin'.

I just thinks real hard.

 

These big thoughts and dreams

just pops in my head sometimes,

and I don't know why.

 

God just done got me

and shoveled large thoughts and dreams

in my big ol' head.

 

 

Some odda new day,

peoples gonna be able

to jumps ta countries.

 

 

Yeah, I da kid with

da big thoughts and big dreams.

God made me that way. 

Author's Note

Yes, yes, I know, grammar problems and spelling is terrible, but thatis the setting. This is supposed to be a little imaginative boy, who has never be educated and is in the year 1833. SO don't bother telling me aout my grammar and junk, ok. I know! Just tell me if you liked that I did that to help you understand the character and the setting and all and tell me if there was enough discription and all. Please and thank you!

Reviews

[Lalli]

lol!! this was very playful...
If anyone couldn't get that the grammactial errors weren't a part fot he character well they should really lighten up a bit hahaha.

you did a great job of getting into character to right it, it was fun to read... one day people will jump ta countries. love it girl!

you always have orginal poems

much love n respect


-Lalli

[Michael Carr]

I liked it. it's touching and sweet. very nice.
the grammar is easy to digest and well integrated.
a bit confusing initially, as the authors note explains it afterword.
still, its a well written piece.
good job.

[Sarah]

Really cute poem. ^__^ I love the way you're able to capture the character of someone in this time period so well, and write from their perspective. That takes a lot of talent. (: Nice job with this!

[lauren emily]

Great write! It's really cute and well written. Again, great job!

[Tony]

I read this before the authors note, and so I must say I first saw the subject as older. After knowing the age group of the person, I see it differently.
Sometimes dreams is all we got!
This is a pretty imaginative poem.

I know that you are using the poor English to portray your character, but there is still one mistake:
Sour..........is the word for how a lemon tastes, not the word for flying gracefully, soar.

[Rainbowco]

I know this child, with the big thoughts and big dreams. I see the smile, the swagger, the look of intelligent eyes. Brilliant Write!

[Nova]

Aw, this was cute. I really liked the format you put it in.
Great Write.

[ANNA]

I thought this was funny, cute, creative, happy, amazing, dreamy, lol This made my day. You have a great gft in your style of writings and I'm learning from you with that! Your just freaking brilliant woman! Love this!!!lol

Much love n respect,
Anna
Great write!! lol