Dead Dry

this is awesome, i enjoyed reading every part in this story.
millions of questions jumped into my head and i would like to keep reading more.
great job.

Posted 9 Years Ago

I really enjoyed reading this and I think that is partly because the authorial voice is good as is your writing style: it's easy to read but full with well placed description. That's what they say right, good writing is hard to write but easy to read. The protagonists anguishes are plain to see (I liked the description of him trying to smell his son's scent). I knew he was up to no good, a sniper perhaps? It would be interesting to read what happens next, and I guess that is my only recommendation... what happens next, please let us know!

Posted 9 Years Ago

Wow what a terrific intro. It was quite a short piece, but still it created so many questions my curiosity now demands the answers to. What happened to Timmy and how is it related to the evil in the cottage Can't wait to read more.

In terms of sentence and paragraph structure, grammar and spelling 10/10. Well written.

Posted 9 Years Ago