The sun’s gentle rays touched my skin as I stepped onto the
edge. My eyes remained fixed on the horizon that slowly started to merge with
those crimson rays, creating a force which softly pulled me closer to the drop.
The sky danced to the changing rhythms of glittering evening colours. It swirled
along to the blue and yellow like a seraphic canvas.
As I inched further to the edge of the cliff, I caught a
glimpse of God’s painting. A breathless view, content in its own soul while I
watched it from above. It had a heart that never stopped beating, and breathed
life into all that surrounded it. I watched
the sea flirt with the sand, pulling each helpless grain into its vastness. The
sea, once an empty pit, now found tranquility in the waters that completed it.
And now, I stood here, on the cliff, looking for something to the fills the
gaps placed in my heart. To find an inspiration, perhaps, that would draw back the
life that once abandoned me. I was back on my feet. I looked down into the eyes
of these clear waters. And then, it was all clear to me. The sky, the land and
the sea, all whispered into my ear, and told me to let go. My heart detached itself
from my brain and welcomed its new found freedom back. It told me to stop thinking.
I shut my eyes and counted to three, and then I jumped.
I jumped into the endless possibilities and an unfamiliar
beginning. I didn’t know what the future held for me after this, but I did know
that I left the person I once was behind on that cliff. Was I to live or die, I
didn’t care. As long as I was not the person I left behind. I left my problems,
my troubles and myself.
Between the sky, the land and the sea, I fell. The wind
caressed its breezy fingers through my hair while guiding my free falling body.
For the first time in years, I was at peace. All my insecurities were abandoned,
and all my regrets were forgotten. I was a new person emerging, as the wind
helped to shed my old skin. I plunged directly into the water and rose back up,
floating around, free from the weight of everything. I lived to remember the experience;
the experience of thoughtlessness. And this thoughtlessness that gave me a
chance to liberate myself, and fling myself into the open; to become a part of
God’s painting. And when I looked up into the sky, it had changed its colour
into a hopeful green.
Great story Pia. How many people have had that calling at the last minute. Lives broken and gone, seemingly with no hope, but to end it all. But then, that sign. Maybe a voice, strong thought. Who knows. But hope it gives. People change and prosper, and reflect.
I've said it before on one of your writings but I'll say it again. I absolutely love the way you write. I don't really have anything negative to say about the way you write. Each word is magical and I hope I'll become a great writer like yourself :)
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
you all are great
thank you for such lovely reviews
I jumped into the endless possibilities and an unfamiliar beginning.
I love this line. This is a great story. A story that truly inspires. Many people say that about work now a days, but I feels it's used to recklessly, but that's not true in this case. A TRULY inspirational piece. Great job.
' I watched the sea flirt with the sand, pulling each helpless grain into its vastness. '
That phrase alone is an epic journey, pia. What an incredible piece of heart-felt writing, a spiritual helter-skelter of sight and feeling, of colours and shadows! For me your jump into vastness is a baptism, a change of direction, a need for the pure and beautiful. One learns so much from looking.. and looking.. until time comes and you're part of the masterpiece. Your mind must be such a beautiful place!!
(Not only do i love the colour green, it's my surname! ) xx
Feels like breathing a fresh air for the first time in a while as I read this. This alone gives me the positivity that we all need to go on with life. Hope often comes to us just when we are about to give it all up. Sometimes it's the only thing that remains to us and the only thing that we actually need.
The color green is also my personal favorite. I always thought it's a refreshing color, and now you just give me a new reason to love it more.. :)
Anyway, very good writing. I love it. Thank you for sharing.
Beautifully written. And I don't say that very often. The way you used description was admirable.
The things we do to change who we are. Leaving everything to chance on a big risk. I guess even if the risk is a folly, and you hit the bottom, you are providing more paint for the next artist. Although, you have so much of it spilling out of you, already.
The whisper of a thrill can shout echos reverberating through your soul, and once again the winds fingers will grace your hair. Enjoyed your story. Thanks for sharing.
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Your analysis and review appreciated and lovely !!
I enjoyed this journey of hope that fell from the edge
to find the center of meaning. I was afraid for a brief moment that it might not end well until I was buoyed up by the freedom of experience. May all our journeys be so that we may find faith in every moment of surrender.
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
everyone's afraid of new beginnings and changes
its when they experience it they have a whol.. read moreeveryone's afraid of new beginnings and changes
its when they experience it they have a whole new feeling
just like the fear one has riding up the roller coaster tracks only to realize the fun and experience when the drop comes :)
Great description Pia. Taken literally it appears to be a story of desperation and suicide but I thinks perhaps a metaphor for someone taking the plunge into a new life. There is a strong religious feel about this and I suppose the chance of a new beginning is central to all religions.
Well done.
Alan
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
They say that the birth of the reader is thr death of an author
I made this story very open .. read moreThey say that the birth of the reader is thr death of an author
I made this story very open ended so that people could relate to it in different aspects or point of views
Thank you so much
Wow. It was really an amazing read!
Really loved it. The words you use and expressions you add are really worth reading. Especially some lines really touched my heart. Like,
"I watched the sea flirt with the sand"
Never thought it could be written that way. Still learning. :)
And did I tell you, green is my fav. color too?? *giggles*
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Omg same its my favourite too !!
Im so glad you liked thisss
Youll learn a lot of way.. read moreOmg same its my favourite too !!
Im so glad you liked thisss
Youll learn a lot of way new ways to express yourself in writing here
7 Years Ago
Ha ha. My friends say that I am so obsessed with the color.
Yep. I have learned many things .. read moreHa ha. My friends say that I am so obsessed with the color.
Yep. I have learned many things in just a few days. And still the journey goes long, long way..... :P