I am a fool

Am I really?

I am a fool

I keep my feelings locked away

and try my hardest every day

just to hear the others say

I am a fool

 

I am strange

I still enjoy those games

as others throw them in the flames

and I hear the man who proclaims

I am strange

 

I am wrong

you can't argue with a block of lead

or a man with nothing in his head

I guess that is why he said

I am wrong

 

I am weak

I do not force my will on others

not their sisters nor their brothers

but still they try my passions to smother

I am weak

 

I am lying

I do my best to serve my God

I do not give in to mad people's law

But still they act overawed

I am lying

 

I am greedy

I try hard to right the wrongs

I try to help the whole night long

but they still say in all the songs

I am greedy

 

Why do they think this way?

is it what I do or what I say?

does it matter anyway?

I am a fool

Author's Note

ignore grammar please
otherwise, please give me some form of review
THX ;-]

Reviews

[Nish Nish the Fish]

very nicely done! No human wants to admit that they're foolish, or that they possess any other poor quality. I love the repetition, much power is shown through your words by the way you use them and reuse them. The message is simple, yet overwhelming at the same time. I appreciated this poem a alot! well done!

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This would make one heck of a song!

[Mauricio Montoya]

i can relate to this piece in a lot of ways I like how it comes together.
but were not fools. Great job.

[Dani]

Definitely a fool. .... nah. just kidding. you're cool.
I like the rhetorical questions in the end.. the questions or anything you say doesn't matter because they've already labeled you a fool. But, if some of the things you mentioned makes you a fool, better a fool than a jerk. ;)

[Im His Daughter]

this is real good!

[Truman S. Booth]

I love the organization and rhyme scheme. The commentary on each self description is clever and thought-provoking; it seems to invite the reader to delve into each line, far deeper than merely reading the words. But if you can write like this, then you are no fool. ;)

[CircusNerd]

Pat this is beautiful! I especially like how you reflected on the topic by asking direct rhetorical questions for the readers to ponder as well. It really emphasized the topic of the poem. Great job!

[Detective Watts]

Nice social commentary.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

This was a strong poem that has a lot of feelings flowing through out! great job!