HURDSFIELD

I live on the Hurdsfield Estate
To the north-east of town
Set on the edge of the countryside
And at the foot of the hills
It's idyllic in many ways
But with a character of it's own

For a start there's the H.A.T.
Which stands for
The Hurdsfield Assault Team
Which has existed for generations
With sons following fathers
They see themselves as protectors
Of the place where they live

There was one memorable instant
When two policemen entered the flats
To arrest someone several floors up
The H.A.T. boys gathered around
The unattended cop car
Whilst someone blocked the lift
They bounced and bounced that car
Until they turned it on it's roof

Now, I don't know if this is true
But it's said that Santa won't come here
Apparently, the last time he did
Before he got back up the first chimney
His sleigh was on bricks
And half the estate were eating venison
But as I said
That's just what I heard

                                   By Phil Roberts

Reviews

[alanwgraham]

This was fun! You've painted a funny even if perhaps slightly exaggerated picture of your estate. I suppose everywhere has it's myths! IYou have written it as a poem but I'm in two minds as to whether it's needed because it reads more like prose.

I live on the Hurdsfield Estate to the north-east of town. Set on the edge of the countryside and at the foot of the hills, it's idyllic in many ways but with a character of it's own.

I do write in free verse myself but the sentences are condensed. You will find that there are many of the writers here who think it has to be punctuation, rhymes and metre all the time but that's not the case,
Well done for this one!
Regards,
Alan

[KWP]

oh ... well ... where you come from sounds like a delightful place (perhaps just not late at night) ...

this is a refreshing read and I am glad I stopped by ... but not for venison so fresh off the bone ...

you poem is rather engaging ... just one thing that put me off was the capital letter on each line and no stops or comma's, fix that and I think you have a beauty X

[Phil Roberts]

Thank you, my friend. I take your point about punctuation and so on. It's been mentioned before and I have changed it on occasions when there has been real need to in order to clarify things. However, it's an old habit from writing song lyrics. It's as much laziness as custom, in honesty but, this was just a throwaway thing :)

[KWP]

i was thinking about your poem this morning ... before I came here just now and I apologise as last night my comment were written when really my body was screaming sleep ...

I have a friend in the north of England and he always tells me that the neighbourhood has gone to shite. The youth disrespectful, old people fear leaving their houses, gang type clusters hang in the streets and sex for teenage girls, not to mention drugs (for both sexes) and they are dirty drugs these days, are all just commonplace and the way that growing up is done ...

your poem sent me into reflection when I read it the first time ... there's much in it ... much ... where is society headed?

[Phil Roberts]

I appreciate that very much. You were quite right about the form but, I tend to go more for content. Thanks again for your interest :)