SEEING THE LIGHT

We saw a light
I swear it
Something bright and crisp
And mother-clean
Or so it seemed to us
All those years ago
But we were so young then
Such noble fools
We believed
Oh, how we believed

Affection swells
And memory seduces
It is easy to love nostalgia
The children we were
Looking so new
Open-mouthed and wonderful
Delighted  and startled
Pointing yearning fingers
At the future
And there it was
And here it is
It's only a light 
Really
I swear it
It's just a light

                             By Phil Roberts

Reviews

[charlie]

I really like this one, Phil. It rolls off easily, and goes in the same.
I can also see why omitting punctuation may be attractive to a poem writer, yet I really believe some of your poems would be the better for it. Like this gem.

Thanks for sharing, Phil. It's a big like over this end.

[Phil Roberts]

Thanks as always, Charlie. I accept what you say about punctuation. The idea has always been that the length of the lines should represent the punctuation but, I realise that it doesn't always work. I think I got into the habit of writing like that because I spent years writing songs and the music and rhythm took the place of formal punctuation but, you are right and I should work on it.