Lilith

oookay, lilith. a demon woman legend of jewish folklore who kills newborn in their sleep and causes men (especially christians) wet dreams and laughs at them. thought it would be interesting.

A myth, a legend or an inconvenient truth?

for when the moon wanes. She will conspire and swoop,

down In the dead of night, invisible to the naked eye.

The newborn children will have a brief life.

 

Infecting the dormant minds of men as they sleep.

Seduced in their dreams, nocturnal emissions in the sheets.

Ashamed of their weakness, in their candle lit room.

They have no idea of the demon infant in her womb.

 

The more life we give the more life she will take.

Her beauty blankets her evil, so make no mistake.

she is unforgiving, relentless and brutal.

The pain of deception, had made her mercurial.

 

So if the infant laughs in the dead of night.

Be on guard, her silouettes in sight.

If you fall into a dream like state,

Wake yourself up…before its too late.

 

Reviews

[Rachael Day]

Oooh so creepy! I love it!! The last two lines about if you fall asleep wake yourself up before it's too late makes me of think of a freddy krueger kinda thing, which is super cool!

The last line of the 1st stanza goes "The newborn children with have a brief life." Is that supposed to be "will have". Just a typo i thought i'd point out.

But i love this!!! Spooky and creepy and dark! Just my kind of thing. Well done!!

[DWatts]

"Seduced in their dreams, nocturnal emissions in the sheets." Made me chuckle immaturely to myself slightly, but the rest was very creepy. Brilliant Poetry as always Phillip

[SHEEMA HUQ]

a dooming, mystical account....the apt warning at the end was needed!

[Harley (arbiter)]

Befroe its too late! Oh no! It was creepy but really not much. Course I am weird. I liked it. It was actually kinda cool.

[Wild Willow Blue]

Dark and creepy. I like it a lot. Nice wording in the last time.

[That_Girl]

Really interesting. Would've never thought to write something like this. "Seduced in their dreams, nocturnal emissions in the sheets" was my favorite line. Vocabulary is strong; the flow appropriate. Love it!