Alcoholic

i've been drunk before and to be honest...its not pleasant most of the time. then i thought what if this happened all the time? how would i feel?

The bottom of this glass holds my answers.

I just gotta go through it, sift through the cancers.

The more I do the more my mind drifts.

Until it stands, on the edge of suicidal cliffs.

 

Pushing so many away because JD pulled me in.

Tempted to end it all, but bottle at the last minute.

“you don’t know me! YOU DON’T KNOW ANY OF ME”

Slurred are my words, rife with stupidity.

 

I used to be so proud, so assertive so…

I don’t know.

I’ll just sit in this armchair and light up a cigarette.

Hoping when the ashes fall, a phoenix will rise from regret. 

Author's Note

im going back to my rhyming based poetry. any pointers on the overall flow?

Reviews

[Melody]

The rhythm and rhyme are like...I guess the best way to put would be synchronized. It's absolutely amazing how well it works. As for the the poem itself it's ....I frightening. I do like it though. (Sorry I'm not a real good reviewer. But I do try to tell what I think.) I do think that maybe you could've made it a little longer though. It's rather short for the topic that it's talking about. I feel like you just sort of left it hanging, but maybe that's just me.

Good day,
Melody

[Fabio_Cassilias]

this is a very nice poem.Poetry is in so many different forms and yh the rhyming is spot on Nice Work mate

[Wild Willow Blue]

Very emotional. I read pt2 first, but I was still able to feel all of these emotions in the order you portrayed them. You are a great writer, my friend.