Chelsea grin

Chelsea grin

A Poem by nigrum homonculus
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i edited it a bit made it longer. might change it more so its more... believable. inspired by the band on my profile page.

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a man, a mistake.

a walking contradiction.

thought it would be funny.

to make drunken accusations.


the claims this man made.

intoxicated by his own doing.

blamed the world with his middle finger.

because nobody listened to his "prophecies"


he then turned to me.

spitting in my face,

with all his fury.

i began to judicate.


He thought his words,

So elegant and ignorant,

Would fly out of his mouth unscathed.

so his arrogant smile is now bloodied...

and permanent.

© 2012 nigrum homonculus


Author's Note

nigrum homonculus
any pointers on how to write better in this style?

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Yes. Study meter get hold of a good source book Ie Lewis Turcos book of forms
Your themes are fresh but you do not do yourself justice. You have some skill at rhyming. Reas your wors aloud and unless they flow as smoothly as warm honey on hotcakes You need to re edit until they do.
We can always improve no matter how long we have been writing Poeticpiers

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Great poem, it really incites the intended emotions.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Yes. Study meter get hold of a good source book Ie Lewis Turcos book of forms
Your themes are fresh but you do not do yourself justice. You have some skill at rhyming. Reas your wors aloud and unless they flow as smoothly as warm honey on hotcakes You need to re edit until they do.
We can always improve no matter how long we have been writing Poeticpiers

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on June 6, 2012
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nigrum homonculus
nigrum homonculus

london, surrey, United Kingdom



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i have been away from this place for.....lord knows, something like 3-4 years? so i guess all the things i have experienced in that time have to come out somehow you know? so here we are. you're readi.. more..

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