title please!

i've been doing this alot...sorry guys. but i need help with a title for this. i tried experimenting with rap but i lost it near the end...idk i was getting serious with it.

Look into my eyes you see a warrior?

Look into my eyes I’m in euphoria.

 

Do battle like its poker, no emotion

Do battle like a surgeon, no commotion.

 

Cold killing m**********r, they all fled.

Cold killing m**********r, they all bled.

 

Making widows for a living, spent aggression.

Making widows for a living, taught a lesson.

 

Realisation of a sin, lifetime lost.

Realisation of a sin, so many lost.

 

Crucifixion of the mind, guilt trip taken

Crucifixion of the mind, cause mistaken.

 

Jagged crown on the head, thorns and roses

Jagged crown on the head, made from choices.

 

I walk with broken legs, on the path of redemption

I walk with broken legs, for all my transgressions.

Reviews

[Baby Ricochet]

Good Poem man. Lets see, Titles
Unrepentant
SAW: To me that's Squad automatic weapon. To most it's a series of Horror films. I've never seen any of them. For some reason horror movies don't scare me.
No Mercy
Sword
unredeemed
Slaughterhaus: I don't think that's actually a word
Panzerdeath
THere's a few ideas. Maybe they all suck, I don't know

[nigrum homonculus]

lol saw isn't scary...its more...whats the word...disturbing? makes you cringe the way the people die e.g getting injected by 20 needles filled with sulfuric acid so your insides melt and bubble.
i really like unredeemed and no mercy. what is panzer death?

[Baby Ricochet]

Panzerwagen is the german word for tank. It got shortend to Panzer. The Germans invented modern war fair as we know it. Panzerdeath sounds to much like a heavy metal band.

[Baby Ricochet]

I like the word panzer. It sounds totally badass to me but I know what it is. The german weirmacht in 1940 man. That was an Army to be proud of. They pulled off some f*****g incredible victories. To bad about all those atrocities though.

[nigrum homonculus]

ooh...that language scares me man. no offence to any german. oh yeah i remember seeing a documentary on some of the german guns and how the luger and berreta were like breakthroughs or something. was that the german elite? i remember hearing about them and how they used to f**k s**t up. i can't remember the name though

[Baby Ricochet]

Oh I know germens always sound like they're bossing you around. The Lugar was the first sucsessful design to have a multi round clip instead of the revolver designs of the 19th century. Berretta hand guns capitalized on that the most well know being the 9mm. The 9mm's the side arm of choice for the US armed forces. It's a nice weapon. 10 round clip standard with a .40 round. Good stopping power for close range. Remington revolvers like the Remington 38 is popular with American Police forces. More power and better range tham a 9mm. Only six shots and you have to load the rounds one at a time into individual chambers. Not good in a fire fight. It's fun to shoot though. Packs a hell of a punch for a hand gun. In the weirmacht only officers carried side arms. In theory the corps was the same but in the field was different. Unit commanders could allow their Marines to carry sidearm and most did. The corps was flexible that way. Sorry, I know about this s**t and no one ever asks

[nigrum homonculus]

haha yeah! that and they sound so pissed aswell. its just a harsh language like ghanian(my native tongue) oh damn! so they fired as fast as you could pull the trigger? i heard they were also pin point accurate aswell. it looks kinda nice. i thought the glock was the most well known though but then again i don't know about guns that much. REMINGTON? dude them things are lethal. they must have the kick of a horse. i could imagine i've always wanted to fire one of them. haha its actually interesting man. i kinda enjoy it.

[That_Girl]

Hmmmm Cold Crowned Warrior? Battle Crowned Warrior? I don't know.... I'm terrible with titles....

Anyways! Really liked it... including the end. "Jagged crown..." - my two favorite lines. Well done!

[nigrum homonculus]

they sound kinda cool. i'll use them with some ideas i have. thanks for reading! much appreciate it!

[SmileBig :)]

Interesting. I like it :) nice job!

[nigrum homonculus]

thanks!

[SmileBig :)]

No problem