cynical b*tch

saw a review and i was like "whoa...that sounds like my ex" another prose poem. another depressing love poem....i gotta stop writing these

Her words, liquid nitrogen.

Even the sun goes down when she speaks.

Fleeing from her voice,

Running to the other side of the world.

She dances with pessimism.

A w***e to misfortune.

Revelling in its juices, marinating in its pool.

She’s a cynical b***h,

But she was my cynical b***h.

Her criticisms only brought me closer,

Clutching me, squeezing me,

my naivety oozing out of every pore.

And like the demon of jewish folklore.

She laughed.

Endlessly.

Endlessly…..

Echoing forever in my hollow head.

And even though she’s long gone.

My heart has still got frostbite.

Her words.

Liquid nitrogen.

In my veins.

Reviews

[Baby Ricochet]

Yeah. Ugly, angery, violent, poetry wears your a*s out after awhile don't it. So I go back and look at some of the one's I did and they've got like 25 views and poems like SideEffects and Get Out of our Park have over 100. Hmm, maybe I'll write more of these and leave off the f*****g war for a while. Poerty as a tool for self expression is great but it's even better when people actually read it. THis one's got 119. THat's pretty good. Good Job Matey. Great now I sound like a f*****g pirate

[nigrum homonculus]

haha that's like most of my poetry. no matter the emotion. they don't get much views. yeah i noticed but that's also because your writing style changed with the subject. that kinda struck a chord with everyone especially me. when i write about sadness or love or both in one poem people seem to love it but my others i don't think they get or think they are that good. just the way the world works ya know? i was kinda suprised at how popular this and "My first love" were aswell due to the fact they are about the same person. LOL wtf man. thanks for reading. i appreciate that

[Baby Ricochet]

Sure man. Hookers and crack didn't go over to great but that's OK. Women aren't going to think that's in the least bit funny and that counts out a lot of readers on this site.

[nigrum homonculus]

yeah i remember you telling me about that. lol i swear a female reviewed it and thought it was funny?

[Baby Ricochet]

That was Marie. She reviews everything I write.

[nigrum homonculus]

ooooooooooooooh oki

[Tai Ryens]

Damn, this was one of your good poems. Anyhoo, I see no flaw, other than the fact that 'brang' in line ten should be changed to the proper form: 'brought.'
Oh, one more thing: Amazing imagery.

[nigrum homonculus]

i fixed that problem you noticed thanks for pointing it out and thank you for reading, i appreciate the kind words

[Baby Ricochet]

"The sun goes down when she speaks" That is so cool.

[nigrum homonculus]

haha thanks man!

[Lisa Ring]

Whomever she may be, she inspired a well written, beautiful poem.

[nigrum homonculus]

ah thank you for that lisa. glad you liked it!

[Mercedes Sanchez]

oh wow, i love this poem. i have to say i agree with the comment below, woman really do have an effect on men. whoever the woman was that this is about was probably a bad b***h lol well done :)

[nigrum homonculus]

haha yeah she was. thanks for reading. much appreciate it.

[xxxrawr_friendxxx]

[nigrum homonculus]

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[xxxrawr_friendxxx]

Sorry my computer's messed up. I meant to say that your ex sounds really horrible but you love her, from my understanding. :3

[nigrum homonculus]

ooooh i see. i wouldn't say love, too strong of a word. i do care a lot when i shouldn't though. thanks for reading!

[xxxrawr_friendxxx]

My pleasure. :)

[Kaylor Mason]

Some women have that effect on people

[nigrum homonculus]

indeed they do...indeed they do.

[That_Girl]

Was it one of 'her' reviews? jc... but I love this! If it's what you need to write... then do it. :)

[nigrum homonculus]

as a matter of fact yes! hell i stole a word or two from the damn thing. thanks!

[That_Girl]

HA! Knew it! Bee-otch! Niiice.... perfect! ;)

[nigrum homonculus]

perfect?! makes me kinda ill in a way

[That_Girl]

No, not that... I mean IT was perfect...the poem... suits her well. :)

[nigrum homonculus]

HAHAHA! oh my that was a burn.

[That_Girl]

Dude! You wrote it!!! It was inspired by HER.... the poem itself was a burn... lol

[nigrum homonculus]

it wasn't intentional! stop twisting my words.

[That_Girl]

...No....

[nigrum homonculus]

we are seriously going to go to war if you're not careful

[That_Girl]

You and me???? Nooooooo...... :) And since when am I ever careful?!

[nigrum homonculus]

HA! try me. er....ok good point.

[That_Girl]

We can't war here... people will get pissy about us blowing up their newsfeed.... send it in the next PM

[nigrum homonculus]

its on.

[That_Girl]

Like Donkey Kong...b***h...