alcoholic pt 3

ok wrote this after a heavy night. a sacrifice i make for once again getting into the mindset of a deadbeat.

 

The drips, they drip into me.

Draining out the blood,

From the bag to my body.

Restoring the fact of mortalilty.

 

Did I lose that much of myself?

In a car crash that feels non existent?

My memory is asinine.

My memory robbed me blind.

 

They say I was gone, a goon, a sinner.

A life lived badly. Bacardi as dinner.

Yet here I am, the flat line couldn’t stop me

And out of this bed I will rise onto my feet.

 

I got a mountain to climb,

Its what the mole hill has become.

So as painful as it sounds.

REHAB HERE I COME!

Reviews

[Baby Ricochet]

that's good man. I've never been to rehab but I know those that have

[nigrum homonculus]

thanks for that. same...it sounds like hell on earth to be fair

[demureminds]

I like this, it encourages change towards a positive direction rather than just expressing the pains of an alcoholic. I especially liked the first stanza, very descriptive and excellent word choice there!

[nigrum homonculus]

thank you! really appreciate that

[kayla]

Wow. This is really good(: Is it true?

[nigrum homonculus]

thanks! glad you liked it. na all the alcoholics aren't true

[Sam Gregory]

Good write, I like poems about deep stuff, especially when well written. Keep up the good work :)

[nigrum homonculus]

thanks bro. glad you enjoyed it

[Cole Hayley]

I loved your last two writes ( I went and read them before this one) and in my opinon this is the best instalment. You are a very honest writer, I love it.

[nigrum homonculus]

thanks man. i really do appreciate you reading 1 an 2 before reading this 1. thanks bro, i felt like this was the weakest. glad you enjoyed it.

[Fabio_Cassilias]

Your talented mate .very good piece that is!

[nigrum homonculus]

thanks bro!

[Wild Willow Blue]

Finally, a third part! I love it! I adore the way this piece flows, and the wording. It's very pleasing to the lips. Well done!

[nigrum homonculus]

haha! sorry for the horribly long wait. for real? i never thought it did! thank you!

[Wild Willow Blue]

For real. :D I wouldn't lie about a poem. You know how much writing means to me.

[nigrum homonculus]

very fair point. again thank you :)

[Wild Willow Blue]

My pleasure. Thank you!

[Melody]

This is really good! Really great DatVirgo! :)

[nigrum homonculus]

thank you melody! glad you liked it

[That_Girl]

Yay for rehab. lol Well done! btw- Bacardi is awesome. :) just saying...

[nigrum homonculus]

its lethal

[That_Girl]

But oh so yummy! :) lol I know it's lethal.... ;)

[nigrum homonculus]

not gonna lie it is. but f*****g hell am i still feeling the effects of it

[That_Girl]

LOL try getting drunk off your a*s with Long Islands.... damn.

[nigrum homonculus]

idk what they are but they sound scary. i was playing dirty pint with my friends and barcardi an some other stuff was in the pint glass....its horrible.

[That_Girl]

Strong a*s drinks. They don't taste like it but... I'm small and they destroyed me. lol fun stuff! :)

[nigrum homonculus]

i must try 1 for my birthday. wait what do they taste like?

[That_Girl]

Vodka, rum, tequila..and gin I think.... along with a few other non alcoholic things... usually lenom or lime or something similar. You don't really taste too much of the alcohol... mainly the other stuff. They're hella good.

[nigrum homonculus]

ok that sounds more like a damn poison. i know if i have one i'm pretty much wrecked. probably be in worse condition than i am right now. sounds even worse than my damn dirty pint!

[That_Girl]

Hahahahaha I forgot!!! They'll probably do waaaaay more to you than they did to me! LOL oh that would be hilarious.....

[nigrum homonculus]

seriously....it probably would. an no it won't be hilarious. you know how hard it is to type properly? them red squiggly are f*****g everywhere and i'm spell checking everything. this ain't life.

[That_Girl]

Awwwww poor wittle baby! ;) I take it you don't cope with hangovers well?? lol

[nigrum homonculus]

allow your sarcasm man. funny enough i actually don't get them. only had 1.

[That_Girl]

Allow??? What? lol stop bitching then! D****t. :)

[nigrum homonculus]

allow...kinda english slang for stop. oh shhhhh. stop bitching about me bitching

[That_Girl]

Ugh... you losers and your slang. ;) Are you back to being amongst the living or what....? I'm not bitching. :)

[nigrum homonculus]

says the people who made "d****e" whatcha mean by that? if you say so...

[That_Girl]

D****e is a great word. How else would we describe 'The Situation'? Dick? Trash? Moron? Oh okay... nvm... those work too. I mean you gave me this whole "I'm leaving for the week... tty Saturday or Sunday" and we've talked every day since.... so i am asking if you are actually back... or if you are still AWOL.

[nigrum homonculus]

SEE! pointless word is pointless. oh that. come on! look what happened in that week! how the hell was i meant to stay off? but yeah i'm back. no more of the preparation crap an what not.