Grim Lullaby

Grim reaper's lullaby to sing you softly into death...

Who is this who stumbles on
Looking for what has been gone
Seeking light where none is found
As their blood is spilled on tainted ground

You've entered a world
Of endless murk
Where demons thrive
And horrors lurk

It seems you're lost
In darkness here
forgetting all
you once held dear

Your mind and soul
shall be reclaimed
Lose yourself
In fear and pain

The only way to go is down
Into deeper depths to drown
Gone is day into the night
So drift away don't try to fight

Come with me and cease to be
Lost in dreadful melody
And with your final dying sigh
I end my fatal lullaby

~*~

Author's Note

I was going to make this a song, but can't find a good melody... Is it good enough to be turned into a small tune or song?

Reviews

[JPDonelan]

I think there is certainly potential for it to be a small tune, as much of it seems like it would work with the appropriate meter or rhythm. I should warn you that I am not, in anyway, a musician nor I am really any good with poetry. What I would suggest, if you want to turn it into a tune or song, is taking a look at some of the words and see if cutting them might improve the pacing or available rhythms.

For example, removing the word "been" in the second line might improve the rhythmic flow (with how I read it, it did seem to).

All that said, I liked it. Had a certain somber quality that worked well for it.