Bare Onion

Second poem in the "rambling" series.

No one understands me the way you do

No one peels me like an onion the way you do

I tried to hide but you dragged me to exposure

I wore my poker face but you ripped it apart

Even when I’m full of shame and mistakes

My foolishness is intolerable

My words are just babbles on my tongue

Like a brand-new horizon, you dawn on me

And all my long-built walls fall down

I’m bare, naked, torn apart

Even when insecurities and doubt fill my heart

You’re still the light I want to follow

I don’t want to miss a single sight

I wish for an illumination

Quietly the prayers stuck inside

Myself keeps longing for your deepest soul

You taught me that no one is too vivid to hold

Searching for courage and in the end I see you.

 

Author's Note

I wrote this poem for someone I had lots of feelings for last year. It belongs to a series I name "rambling" including 4 poems. English isn't my native language, and although I've learned it for 7 years, I've just tried writing poem recently, so constructive comments are very much welcome.

Reviews

[Distant horizons]

Really very good. maybe i would consider changing

My foolishness are intolerable
to
My foolishness is intolerable

but otherwise, excellent.