you are the key

Moonlit struck night on the lake
High above dragon so fly to make
My beauty none of your business
You can’t see my niceness
 
Through my sharp tongue
You hear the gong
Love is seen clearly with me
You are the key

You saw my wrath
Now do my math
Light my candle
Where is my sandal

My hair is black
Your in my sack
My eyes are blue
You are my clue

Lock my heart
Make your mark
Take the key
And love me
  Please

Reviews

[dw817]

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W O W ! Outstanding rhyming in here ! Methinks you really wanna go on a dragon ride. Have you ever seen the movie, "Neverending Story, Qi ?"

[phantomcristal]

no and call me Ki-chan

[dw817]

Ok. Well, Neverending story is about a flight on a dragon, and it's a live action film, and there's a kid in it who rides him - maybe someone quite similar to you ? It's a great story too. :)
http://www.youtube.com/v/jbncmdHxobg

[MandaBear]

Again you truly amaze! =)

[tuvi]

some changes required :

"Moonlit struck night on the lake " - Moonlight
" Your in my sack" - you are in my sack

Rest of it is fine ....neat clear write up ...well done :)
keep writing what you enjoy ......

[phantomcristal]

IT WAS MENT TO BE THAT WAY how old are you anyway

[tuvi]

It was just a suggestion not a critic..

[phantomcristal]

ok ....................................