Forever

Inspired by an ex boyfriend. Not much else. Make of it what you will.

Your arms around my shoulder, in seeps the heat;

I feel love and a blanket of protection so sweet.

Grabbing my hand as naturally as breathing;

My love, please tell me you are never leaving.

I know it's cliche, but I pull you into the rain;

I kiss and kiss you-- how could I refrain? 

You put your hands on either side of my face;

Look me in the eyes and say "You, I could never replace."

I now know what romance novels mean;

My children need your blue eyed gene.

All night you talk and listen on the phone;

Your voice on the other end reminds me I'm not alone.

We lay in the park and pick out shapes in the clouds;

Whispering and giggling oblivious to the crowds.

I cry on your pillow and worry all day;

You hold me close and promise it's okay.

Looking so deep into my eyes I am scared;

Against you, everyone will pail when compared. 

Brush your lips so beautifully across mine;

You are my love, so wonderfully divine. 

Remind me again, how do I breathe? 

I pray to God daily that you won't leave.

Lay your head in my lap and watch this movie with me;

I'll stroke your hair, you'll say "I love you," and I will agree.

I love you;

I always will, too.

Author's Note

This was inspired by my first (and recently ex) boyfriend.
I would enjoy any critiquing.
I always feel like I really suck at writing, but whatever.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Poem is beautiful. The feeling of love and gentle emotion in every line. It is well written. Flow of story is very good. Each line made the poem more loving and kind. A excellent poem. We must remember the good times. Old heart need to hold on to sweet dreams.
Coyote

[Alicia™]

This poem is beautiful, and the lines are great. However, I'm not feeling the flow of the words that much. I think it could be that some of the rhyming feels a little forced...

[shinybluestars03]

I totally agree with Sofa this poem
does not suck its an amazing and
heartfelt poem so much emotion.
Keep on writing.
Thanks for sharing.

Best wishes :)

[Sofa]

You don't suck! You're really good at putting emotion into your writing.
Also.. I thought this was kind of funny; "My children need your blue eyed gene."
hehe :)