Star

never apart

A little moment

Of forgetfulness

Is all I need

To remember

What you eloped with

To the infinity

Of beryl-coal.

Author's Note

I've written this verse in my mother's point of view..Amidst the chaos of her hectic life,my mama often forgets whatever she's doing,no matter how urgent the task and fondly reminisces the times when my dear grandma was there with us.

Reviews

[MachinaWriter]

I had a really good review of this poem written until WC decided to freeze up on me. No matter. This is a beautiful poem. You capture in a few brief lines what I attempt to evoke in pages of poetic verse. This is a beautiful poem, made all the more so by its profound simplicity. I envy you, this is truly a heartfelt piece.

[Transience]

thanks.i am really happy it touched you.that's the greatest reward for any writer.

[K-mo]

short but full of insightfulness! great work!

[Transience]

thank you k

[K-mo]

your welcome!

[pumpkin head]

Very nicely written and heartfelt.

[Transience]

thank you...

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. absolutely beautiful poetry ...
. heartfelt and soulful beyond measure ...

[Transience]

oh me...........you wish me to die with a swollen heart........lol.........

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. no, no ... i only want you to live and write poetry with a swollen heart :P ...