the manikin

the manikin

A Poem by Peter H
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a short fun one . nothing to write home about

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who are you ?
why did you replace the person 
who was once here ?

i can't see your face 
i only see a manikin 


white all over  immaculately  featureless 
who are you and what did you do to the person 
whom existed  before you .

© 2017 Peter H


Author's Note

Peter H
i wouldn't call this anything great or too profound , its just something i felt like writing .

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Interesting write,
I like it, there are a few open ends as far as the ideas go but i like it. Not my favorite, it feels a little just thrown out there. But then again sometimes it is important for us to write these things out as well. All thoughts of my addled mind but I like this.
Sincerely
Christopher
90/100

Posted 11 Years Ago


Peter H

11 Years Ago

thanks broskie i did say this one was just thrown out their in the review box lol :) but i'm happy y.. read more
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Pax
i understand the feeling all too well my friend ~
i often asked that question myself when i look at the mirror...
relate-able piece!
many do understand this, your not alone in that matter!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Peter H

11 Years Ago

thank you for the review pax :)
You say this was not intened to be great or profound, but you've certainly created it that way. Well penned Sir.
You've said so in a way that many can interpret it.....
It can be difficult to understand the many reasons as to why we question the person infront of us. Clever write.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Peter H

11 Years Ago

thank you very much , "tglyg" for the review one day you'll bless us with this mysterious real name .. read more
there are many reasons why a person might decide to become something else. it is incalculable....if they are a friend, trust them and accept. if not, beware and watch. well penned piece!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Peter H

11 Years Ago

thank you quinfin your review inspires me
quinfinn

11 Years Ago

always welcome
quinfinn

11 Years Ago

shh, ps.....it is spelled mannequin
This is a question that I have asked before. Ambiguous behavior can cause us to wonder who the person is standing in front of us, they are not the person I once knew! Emotionless...
Good imagery. Thank you.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Peter H

11 Years Ago

thanks for the review :)
A good poem on substitution for a person with a manikin . Short but very good...:)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Peter H

11 Years Ago

ah you got the second meaning my friend good :) .
Sami Khalil

11 Years Ago

You are welcome...:)
Poetry is to create thoughts. You did. A manikin is a lonely object. I like the question asked in the poem.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago


Peter H

11 Years Ago

thank you very much mp! :)
Well, Peter, it's just something I felt like reading.
And, I'm not at all sorry I did.
Fascinating piece!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Peter H

11 Years Ago

i'm happy you liked it my friend .
This one leaves a lot to interpretation, but sometimes I'd rather just describe how a poem makes me feel. When you no longer recognize the man in the mirror it could be because you are on the verge of a profound change, you are now a clean slate, renouncing the former and ready to remodel. A featureless entity is featureless because you (you have the power to recreate yourself from the inside out) have yet to draw your own character. This is just where your poem took me, a very interesting piece ph20

Posted 11 Years Ago


Peter H

11 Years Ago

thank you for the review that is the superficial point , and it does have another meaning but i gues.. read more
Tree

11 Years Ago

I thought you might have some deeper component to this, I just wanted to share with you my immediate.. read more
Peter H

11 Years Ago

inspiring words you make salient points as usual my friend i appreciate your reviews very much i th.. read more

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Peter H
Peter H

georgetown, 4, Guyana



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hey nice to meet you all . i'm peter i'm just a boy , i'm from guyana .i just wanted a place to share the profound part's of my thoughts more..

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