the manikin

a short fun one . nothing to write home about

who are you ?

why did you replace the person 

who was once here ?

i can't see your face 

i only see a manikin 

white all over  immaculately  featureless 

who are you and what did you do to the person 

whom existed  before you .

Author's Note

i wouldn't call this anything great or too profound , its just something i felt like writing .

Reviews

[unsavable_soul]

Interesting write,
I like it, there are a few open ends as far as the ideas go but i like it. Not my favorite, it feels a little just thrown out there. But then again sometimes it is important for us to write these things out as well. All thoughts of my addled mind but I like this.
Sincerely
Christopher
90/100

[Peter H]

thanks broskie i did say this one was just thrown out their in the review box lol :) but i'm happy you liked it :)

[Pax]

i understand the feeling all too well my friend ~
i often asked that question myself when i look at the mirror...
relate-able piece!
many do understand this, your not alone in that matter!

[Peter H]

thank you for the review pax :)

[The Girl That Let You G..]

You say this was not intened to be great or profound, but you've certainly created it that way. Well penned Sir.
You've said so in a way that many can interpret it.....
It can be difficult to understand the many reasons as to why we question the person infront of us. Clever write.

[Peter H]

thank you very much , "tglyg" for the review one day you'll bless us with this mysterious real name :) and i won't have to use an abbreviation :) :P

[quinfinn]

there are many reasons why a person might decide to become something else. it is incalculable....if they are a friend, trust them and accept. if not, beware and watch. well penned piece!

[Peter H]

thank you quinfin your review inspires me

[quinfinn]

always welcome

[quinfinn]

shh, ps.....it is spelled mannequin

[Designer]

This is a question that I have asked before. Ambiguous behavior can cause us to wonder who the person is standing in front of us, they are not the person I once knew! Emotionless...
Good imagery. Thank you.

[Peter H]

thanks for the review :)

[Sami Khalil]

A good poem on substitution for a person with a manikin . Short but very good...:)

[Peter H]

ah you got the second meaning my friend good :) .

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Coyote Poetry]

Poetry is to create thoughts. You did. A manikin is a lonely object. I like the question asked in the poem.
Coyote

[Peter H]

thank you very much mp! :)

[FJ Davis]

Well, Peter, it's just something I felt like reading.
And, I'm not at all sorry I did.
Fascinating piece!

[Peter H]

i'm happy you liked it my friend .

[Tree]

This one leaves a lot to interpretation, but sometimes I'd rather just describe how a poem makes me feel. When you no longer recognize the man in the mirror it could be because you are on the verge of a profound change, you are now a clean slate, renouncing the former and ready to remodel. A featureless entity is featureless because you (you have the power to recreate yourself from the inside out) have yet to draw your own character. This is just where your poem took me, a very interesting piece ph20

[Peter H]

thank you for the review that is the superficial point , and it does have another meaning but i guess i didn't articulate it as well to make that other meaning as transparent as this one .

[Tree]

I thought you might have some deeper component to this, I just wanted to share with you my immediate reaction, how it made me feel. Sometimes when we journey into someone's poem for the first time we shape it to our own experiences. The most important thing when I get feedback from others is that it triggered something inside of them, even if it wasn't what the artist intended.

[Peter H]

inspiring words you make salient points as usual my friend i appreciate your reviews very much i think i can learn many things from you:)