the manikin

the manikin

A Poem by Peter H
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a short fun one . nothing to write home about

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who are you ?
why did you replace the person 
who was once here ?

i can't see your face 
i only see a manikin 


white all over  immaculately  featureless 
who are you and what did you do to the person 
whom existed  before you .

© 2017 Peter H


Author's Note

Peter H
i wouldn't call this anything great or too profound , its just something i felt like writing .

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I love how simple it was and how everything fell together . great job !

Posted 11 Years Ago


IKt is interesting suggesting someone has changed and the protagonist cannot recognise them as the same person. Interesting.

Posted 11 Years Ago


It's a good little poem. I like it

Posted 11 Years Ago


Peter H

11 Years Ago

thanks bro
Well done... its short but not devoid of meaning. It actually is an awesome concept.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Peter H

11 Years Ago

thank you very much ph!
I do believe this is the first poem I've ever read on a mannequin, that didn't have love as the background writing promt. Its very intriqing.
Questions worth asking. Lol


Posted 11 Years Ago


Peter H

11 Years Ago

i almost never do the lovey dovey stuff i do the hurt ones seldom i believe those poems are too gene.. read more
Infinity Blues

11 Years Ago

Very true. And you do write them well dearie :)
Peter H

11 Years Ago

i saw what you did there lol
An interesting piece Peter, may I recommend that you look at my poem; MANNEQUIN OF SINS, you are the only other poet, as far as I know who has written about this rather niche subject matter :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Peter H

11 Years Ago

i will checkit out thank you
There is nothing wrong with this piece. It is short but carries it's meaning well. Where once stood a warm and vibrant being now stands a cold and unfeeling one. What caused this change and where did the person you used to know go?

Nicely done. :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Peter H

11 Years Ago

that is the question in the poem i hope it can relate because we all lose ourselves once in awhile a.. read more
I really like the concept of this, And i understand what that feeling is like, very sad. I agree with Robert this is much better than you think. Well done. Keep writing!!! :D

Posted 11 Years Ago


Nicely penned Peter...it is sad isnt it when people become manikins...as they say beauty
is only skin deep...Rose:)

Posted 11 Years Ago


I think the number of comments you've received on this poem show it is better than you think it is. It is good that you posted this. You never know who may relate, or how it may affect any potential reader. Keep writing, my friend.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Peter H

11 Years Ago

thank you very much robert your review is must appreciated

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Peter H
Peter H

georgetown, 4, Guyana



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hey nice to meet you all . i'm peter i'm just a boy , i'm from guyana .i just wanted a place to share the profound part's of my thoughts more..

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