broken clock

broken clock

A Poem by Peter H
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nothing much .

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Broken on the wall of this store

“Sale broken clock “

-Laughs- who would buy a broken clock?

Nothing works, I can’t tell time so what use am I?

I wish someone would buy me, fix me, and take care of my faults

Why  is  this child staring at me, I wonder if he realizes I don’t work

“What good is a clock that doesn't tell time” he asks 

“No good", his father replies.

I wish I can start moving again, and then someone might buy me

But that’s just wish full thinking. I spend my days on this wall

Not knowing neither night nor day in a endless impasse

but  i still hope that one day time moves for me again.

© 2013 Peter H


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I sense your anxed disposition, here, your vexation as temporary as a time scales, I am pleased to feedback, though I appreciated especially, the way you adopted the role of the sorrowful, broken clock, ha ha!! Well done Peter, pen on!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Peter H

11 Years Ago

thank you again for the review my friend ;)
Sounds like the deepest plea of a human heart: the feeling of being marred and unusable and the desire to be noticed and edified by our fellow man. Good work here, my friend.

Posted 11 Years Ago


This is a beautiful poem. I like this story very much. I like that he still has hope and in time, I believe, someone will appreciate him, flaws and all. We are all a little broken, but we are all worth so much still. :) Well written, great job.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Peter H

11 Years Ago

thank you very much mrs.marie :)
JenniferMarie

11 Years Ago

You're welcome :)
even a clock that's broken is right twice a day......terrific write here peter, well done!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Peter H

11 Years Ago

lol it;s alright i'm happy you enjoyed it :)
quinfinn

11 Years Ago

still lovin it, Peter
Peter H

11 Years Ago

thanks :) quinfiniy
Well, it's right twice a day isn't it?

Posted 11 Years Ago


Peter H

11 Years Ago

i would believe so but only for a second , thank you for the review it made me laugh :)
Very nice Peter, Bravo!
This is a very original piece to my eyes and mind. Sure the concept of time and relation to self are well covered but this is the first time i have seen it done in this fashion with the broken clock on sale and no one wanting to buy it and also the reflections of the clock's thoughts on self and future events. This is a very profound piece friend.

"“What good is a clock that doesn't tell time” he asks
“No good", his father replies."
Very good line here in the center. It sums up everything while allowing the reader to move comfortably in to the clock's thoughts and telling end in it's hopes and that while broken it is still ready to work again. Often I feel this is a perfect metaphor to our hearts or even lives. Most excellent piece Peter, seriously.
Sincerely
Christopher
105/100
P.s. May I add this to my library friend?

Posted 11 Years Ago


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unsavable_soul

11 Years Ago

Oh I am, believe that.
You grasp interesting concepts by the horns often. I have appreciation .. read more
Peter H

11 Years Ago

thank you for the review chris you truly inspire me with your words i'd love for you to have it with.. read more
A very good write and concept. I really like your works...:)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Peter H

11 Years Ago

thank you sami i think your work is awesome as well :)
Sami Khalil

11 Years Ago

The feelings are mutual...:)
I like this, you've actually written a poem on the clocks thoughts. Very nice

Posted 11 Years Ago


Peter H

11 Years Ago

thank you for the review :)
Intriguing perspective using this "clock" creative metaphor. We are all broken is some manner!
The last line really grabbed me. "I'll still hope that one day time moves for me again!"
Incredibly powerful word picture! Where would we as humans be without HOPE! Impressive piece! Thanks for sharing it!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Peter H

11 Years Ago

thank you very much miss designer :) i appreciate your review
a perspective of a clock's thoughts and yet the thoughts fit present economic conditions experienced throughout the world.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Peter H

11 Years Ago

i like what you got from this :) chris

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Peter H
Peter H

georgetown, 4, Guyana



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hey nice to meet you all . i'm peter i'm just a boy , i'm from guyana .i just wanted a place to share the profound part's of my thoughts more..

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