broken clock

nothing much .

 

 

Broken on the wall of this store

“Sale broken clock “

-Laughs- who would buy a broken clock?

Nothing works, I can’t tell time so what use am I?

I wish someone would buy me, fix me, and take care of my faults

Why  is  this child staring at me, I wonder if he realizes I don’t work

“What good is a clock that doesn't tell time” he asks 

“No good", his father replies.

I wish I can start moving again, and then someone might buy me

But that’s just wish full thinking. I spend my days on this wall

Not knowing neither night nor day in a endless impasse

but  i still hope that one day time moves for me again.

Reviews

[Clove]

Hmm very good at describing a clock. You have an excellent creativity side, and it is very creative to imagine what goes on in a broken clocks mind. I am sure someone would like to repair that broken clock, anyway excellent poem! :)

[James E. Peterson]

Hmm exceptionally well done Peter. It's unfortunate really, I'm possibly the only Trinidadian on this site. Good to encounter a good write, and a fellow Indo-Caribbean-er.

[Onku Ghosh]

Very creative! Just like the broken clock, no person ever wants to go through the plight of the clock.Enjoyed reading your poem.Very good write!!

[lovejulez03]

Nicely done, I liked it :)

[Dhaye]

Nice concept, Peter. Nice literary device (Personification). I also made a poem related to this but it is about TIME.

Keep writing.

[Peter H]

thank you very much :)

[Archangel Gabriel]

Interesting piece Peter. It certainly helps the reader get in touch with the sentiment of the piece even if it does have a few areas that need editing.

[Peter H]

thanks you can point out the parts that need editing .

[Baby Ricochet]

interesting concept for a poem, Good work Peter

[Peter H]

thank you :)

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Well done, Peter... i applaud your creative expression of complex emotion.

[Peter H]

thanks bro :)

[NebraskaHope]

I like the personification of this poem . It was enjoyable . I also liked the the comparison of you and the clock . Great job !

[Peter H]

thank you my friend your review is mostappreciated

[SyberRose]

Oh i liked this Peter...very creative...and I like what quin said about being right twice a day...:)