the you within you

i felt like simply writing a simple poem :)

deep within you 

there  is a balance that makes you  ,"you".

don't give up on finding yourself within "yourself"

scream to the anti you that "this is not you!"

eradicate the malevolent you 

that seeks to the destroy the benevolent you

stand up and fight the ,"anti yous",  for that is 

the only way to find the you within "you".

Author's Note

hmmmmmm , review away :)

Reviews

[TrimarcoRansome]

I Love it! from a young persons perspective the battle within, finding who you are is a mighty struggle.
Beautifully put into words, well done

[Peter H]

thank you very much trimarco:)

[The Daisy]

Simple yet insightful.

It is hard to fit in this world that people, especially teens compromise who they are even if it means their 'death'.

[Rhea752]

This is very insightful. Very true, People are multifaceted creatures. Well written :) Keep it up!!!! :D

[Peter H]

thank you very much rhea752 :)

[The Girl That Let You G..]

Powerfully strong. Simple form, so much meaning...Complex and wise.
Great work Peter

[FJ Davis]

Wise and well-said, Peter!

[Peter H]

these things comes to me on long walks my friend and i have so much arguments on things like this i think i should acknowledge him in these poems better yet i'll write a poem about him. thank you for the review franky can i call you framky senpai :)

[Robert L.]

Like a hammer striking a nail into place, the repetition of "you" makes this poem's message stronger and more memorable.

[Peter H]

thank you very much my friend your review is cherished considerably :)

[Charliee]

This is really good i like it. Telling people to be themselves and find themselves and not somebody else. This is good

[Pax]

for me there is a war going on within me, it's in silent wars ~ you'll never know which side to turn to for both is me ~ whatever i do i always find my balance ~ coz i can never eradicate the malevolent me, for it's a part of me ~ we just have to be reasonable like i said find your balance :)
great work my friend!

[Peter H]

thank you

[unsavable_soul]

I love the emphasis on "you", few pieces can have what would be defined as an over usage of a word be so striking and compelling. In this instance I couldn't imagine it with even one less usage of the word "you"... I like how your simple piece to me is so much more. I think the strength and weight of this piece literally comes from the excellent execution of the many "you"s. Lol... That "you" used.
Bewitching
Chris

[Peter H]

wow thank you so much lol your words make me feel jubilant about this

[unsavable_soul]

As you should my friend, it truly is inspiring and powerful. I would to friend you, and potentially after I review a bit more of your work subscribe to you. Would that be alright by you?
Chris

[Peter H]

ofc btw your work is great also man :) , i'm not as prolific as some other writer's here . btw if you want someone who's an excellent friend here friend
http://www.writerscafe.org/marcmarlon
he reviews alot and also he gives some excellent insight

[unsavable_soul]

Thanks I will definitely check them out. I think prolific isn't always best. Sometimes to the point or straight forward is the best way to execute understanding in your audience.
Chris

[SHEEMA HUQ]

I like this, thought provoking piece, concise, yet meaningful

[Peter H]

thank you for your words