to me this poem comes as a poem about how some people try to make you risks which maybe you shouldn't do, people who might be jealous,hate you, or just unaware of the circumstances. the way you portray this overall theme is majestic and the words are delicately chosen. amazing poem :D
to me this poem comes as a poem about how some people try to make you risks which maybe you shouldn't do, people who might be jealous,hate you, or just unaware of the circumstances. the way you portray this overall theme is majestic and the words are delicately chosen. amazing poem :D
Thought-provoking write on risks and consequences and the poem did present a dilemma for the reader. I think those who push others to take the risk must first take them, then it would not be so bad or one sided. I like the style used here and the short but challenging words you used.
Vaulable insights here, I think we all as we get older and wiser, make mistakes the lead us to be more mindful of these risks and why are we taking them. Great work and thank you for sharing.
... It is nothing to him He is immune to that blackness The risk is mine alone ...
wonderful line and I felt as if I was there with you
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So glad you enjoyed it :) Thanks for reading!
I liked this write, so short, but yet with so much underlaying truth in it...
As for him it's no risk, it could be for you, and that's a keen insight, into any releationship, whether it is just friendship, a partner, a lover, a family member,
If we all could empathize with each other some more, there where no questions like this needed, nor forced behaviour from an opposite, but we are otherwise so beautifully different each one. Thank you Persephone for this insight, and the words, enjoyed reading this.
not everyone in life needs to be a risk taker, and I must say from experience, sometimes taking the risk is so not worth it. That being said..sometimes we need a little push in our lives to take risks that are good for us, not knowing they are until we have fully jumped. You.. expressed that beautifully in this poem. I liked it .. immensely and I am keeping it in my library for that next time I am unsure if I should take the leap..
Not everyone loves roller coasters, and some times and places spontaneity CAN end up just too thoughtless. Finding a personal balance you can live comfortably with is a good goal and a daily challenge. You set a good pace and followed the thought through.
well I am a sucker for a challenge and a fall guy usually, it cannot be the obvious so I go for you NOT wishing to bunjee jump into marriage...Oh hell...I knew I was wrong
great poem though all the same, it could be about any challenge in life..it fits the bill
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12 Years Ago
Thank you for the guess Dr! I will revel it in time hehe Thanks for reading!