Repeat

Repeat

A Poem by Persephone

The story is simple

Born in childhood

Rooted in adolescence

Groomed in adulthood

 

A cycle set on repeat

 

Second-best

Not enough

Unimportant am I

 

Failed relationships

Frustrations

A dark moment

Again

There it is

 

With any spark of a new adventure

Like a forgotten errand

It hurtles into my mind

 

Why bother

You’ll fail

What’s the point in trying?

 

I must halt this rhythm

End this redundant tale

 

Convince the child

Assure the adolescent

Reason with the adult

 

That story’s untrue

An unjustified lie

Bred of reckless tongues

 

You are worthy

Unique

Of value to many

 

And today

You are writing

 

So be it

Do it

Think it

And Repeat

© 2012 Persephone


Author's Note

Persephone
Came to me before bed.....feedback always appreciated and as always thanks for reading:)

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My first poem of yours and already thirsty for more. I wasn't sure where it was going, until my favorite stanza began.

"Convince the child
Assure the adolescent
Reason with the adult"

The positive contrast at the ending of the poem was really great. After I read it, I felt a weight lifted off my chest, almost as I can imagine this person feels once they realize this cycle has to stop. It's great, what you did here, with words. And my second favorite part of the stanza, aside from the precision in choosing your words, is the way it shows determination. You didn't imply the cycle that has been repeated for a lifetime was an easy fix. By walking through the stages of convincing, assuring, and reasoning, you satisfied me with the realistic idea that it's going to take just as much hard work and determination to be positive as there was force in this person from the start toward the negative. I'm very wordy, sorry. What I mean is, the change wasn't overnight, and that's what I loved the most. The hope that even if it takes a while, it will happen.


Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Persephone

12 Years Ago

Exactly! Thank you so much for the review and taking the time to read!



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Ok. A really good piece. For one so young you should forget pain and enjoy experience. But hey this is an emotional poem which I liked a lot.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Persephone

12 Years Ago

Thanks!
This is a very straightforward piece, or should I say it is easy to understand? I like the rhythm, which reads like the person in ther poem is beint hit. Very good, thank you.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Persephone

12 Years Ago

Thank you for reading!
A wonderful way to overcome. May the truth and light come out in poetry from the wise:)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Persephone

12 Years Ago

Thanks for reading! :)
So be it
Do it
Think it
And Repeat

I LOVE IT!!! Very inspiring.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Persephone

12 Years Ago

Thank you!
Really pretty and so true! I think everyone feels like their life is not important, but then they have a point in their life when they realize that everyone is here for some sort of reason.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Persephone

12 Years Ago

Very true, thank you for reading!
very nice writting. I feel I live in repeat. I does seem like we're in a circle of life that repeats. The memories of the good feelings always make us want to try again even when we do fail. I myself am on my third merry-go-round. I hate myself for being so needy. :)

Jimmy

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Persephone

12 Years Ago

Life just is that way - thank you for reading:)
Very nice, has good poetic rhythm.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Persephone

12 Years Ago

Thank you!
Beautifully written

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Persephone

12 Years Ago

Thank you!
isn't it odd how they just come into your mind without invitation? This is quite remarkable I think.
Long may the words invade you

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Persephone

12 Years Ago

Thank you Doctor :)
Dr. Wood ?

12 Years Ago

you are very welcome...Can't sleep so might as well read and write...Blooming seagulls....Bah...Humb.. read more
Persephone

12 Years Ago

Haha Good Luck!
My first poem of yours and already thirsty for more. I wasn't sure where it was going, until my favorite stanza began.

"Convince the child
Assure the adolescent
Reason with the adult"

The positive contrast at the ending of the poem was really great. After I read it, I felt a weight lifted off my chest, almost as I can imagine this person feels once they realize this cycle has to stop. It's great, what you did here, with words. And my second favorite part of the stanza, aside from the precision in choosing your words, is the way it shows determination. You didn't imply the cycle that has been repeated for a lifetime was an easy fix. By walking through the stages of convincing, assuring, and reasoning, you satisfied me with the realistic idea that it's going to take just as much hard work and determination to be positive as there was force in this person from the start toward the negative. I'm very wordy, sorry. What I mean is, the change wasn't overnight, and that's what I loved the most. The hope that even if it takes a while, it will happen.


Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Persephone

12 Years Ago

Exactly! Thank you so much for the review and taking the time to read!

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