A Cruel Identity

 

Lonely

An identity I cling to with ferocity

 

Don’t take it

I want you

 

But it frightens me

What else do I have?

 

If I’m not a single…What am I?

Who am I?

 

A man’s? A husband’s?

 

A possession…..

 

I may fight

I may run

I may curse your name

 

But it’s only the fear of losing

The loneliness

 

It’s all I’ve ever known

Author's Note

It is such a cruel identity

Reviews

[Baby Ricochet]

I like it. It's like Identities and Persona's. Like your name's Persephone. She was the Daugter of Demetar and Zeus and was forced to Marry her totally weird uncle Hades. That was a messed up story. Where was I going with this? Oh yeah. Persephone is an archetype and an Archetype is an Idenity and this poem is called "A cruel Identity." Persephone's story is one of betrayal, abduction & cruelty but through her experience she became the queen of the underworld. I get all these connections from this which is totally awesome. I hope that makes sense. It does in my brain but sometimes I mudle the explanation. Thanx

[Persephone]

Thank you! I didn't think about the similarities when I was writing it, but your right! Very cool! Thank you for reading!

[Kimberly "Melody" Carne..]

A powerful piece within so few words!

[Persephone]

Thank you!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

You are too beautiful internally and externally to be sad. Stop it!

[Persephone]

Haha thank you! The poetry is helping :)

[Crazy Cat Man]

Yikes this poem makes me afraid of everything. made me afraid of being single :P and the fear of being in a crappy relationship.

If I’m not a single…What am I?
Who am I?
A man’s? A husband’s?
A possession…..

that part made me sad for i have lady friends who have been in mentally abusive relationships with men who treat them more as possessions than a actuall girlfriend

[Persephone]

I know....it is a sad reality of our society- thank you for reading!

[Pax]

brilliant. great job

[Persephone]

Thank you!

[Robin]

Knowing is a cage ..

[Persephone]

one we make ourselves

[Robin]

exactly

[Celestial Witch Child]

This is an amazing piece of poetry. I love your honesty; it came through beautifully in your diction. Simple yet melancholy and relatable to the reader. Wonderful work.

[Persephone]

Thank you!

[Eagle Cruagh]

Now you know !

You are none of those things, you are the
one in charge. YOu make the decisions
about what to wear and what to take off.

Men try to create you in their image, but
you know the truth. You are in charge.
----- John

[Persephone]

Lets hope I keep that knowledge! Thanks again for reading:)

[Chris]

Uniqueness and worth - all most everyone wants. The shame is why many find their identity in being with or near another. They lose themselves...

Strong write, and for once no contest mention.

[Persephone]

No, only 2 were for contests, hehe Thanks again for reading Chris!

[Havoc08]

This is a very unique insight into you, I agree with your feelings of being like a possession. People I use to associate with would treat their women like that, wrong just wrong...I mean how could you ever get that everlasting love and endearment that a woman can give you if they are mere possessions. It's there, I can feel it in your words but he'll never know. Chin up Girlie! there's one out there! be patient and do not fret, when it's time it will happen. I too am still dreaming for it...:)

[Persephone]

Thanks Havoc! I haven't given up hope and you shouldn't either :) Thank you again for reading!

[CareLuv]

very interesting poem, well written...can really relate to it a lot right now

[Persephone]

I'm so glad you enjoyed it, thank you for reading!