Shane Shane

What words do I have to describe

Love and hate combined

 

How I could yearn for a person one minute

Then turn screaming in despise at the next

 

What power do you possess?

Where did you learn your technique

To create these conflicting emotions inside of me?

 

I once thought myself strong and unchangeable

No one could break my soul or spirit

 

Before I could blink,

In a whirlwind,

 You proved me ever so wrong.

I lay there, shattered at your feet

 

Mouth gaping,

Still,

In awe of your power

 

However, in your haste to destroy you forgot

I had a choice

 

To remain at your mercy,

 Battered and beaten on your floor

Or

Rise out of the dark

Using you as a healthy reminder

That I am breakable

 

Author's Note

This poem was the product of an emotionally abusive relationship

Reviews

[Persephone]

Keep on writing your beautiful talent, and practicing these feelings. They are rich, full of self awareness, and also a bit paranoid in positive, don't get me wrong.... But it's good... it keeps you sharp, you're just a beautiful human being, and you have to trust in yourself.

I enjoyed it very much dear lady.

E.L.

[Persephone]

Thank you so much! I will :)

It's such a beautiful and honest piece... you have it in you :) all...

[Kaylor Mason]

Even no relationship at all is better than an abusive relationship. Abusive relationships are not relationships at all--they're a breeding ground for tragedies and all sorts of violent crime

[Persephone]

Very true - thank you for reading :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Wow this is powerful. I like your style it is too my taste short and expressive in few words.

[Persephone]

Thank you!

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

Another well thought out and flawless piece. You look back, assess, realize, and RISE.
"Rise out of the dark
Using you as a healthy reminder
That I am breakable" and here is the answer...the lesson. You are there.

[Persephone]

That lesson is whats most valuable :) thanks for reading!

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

:)

[Seyi Ojenike]

Nice emotional expression

[Persephone]

Thank you!

[Maya Storm]

You had my attention from the first line
"What words do I have to describe
Love and hate combined "

Fav line: "Using you as a healthy reminder..."

Oh I know that feeling it's love or lust... whatever it is... That person exist for everyone. The person that makes your question your entire being. You have painted the picture of that person soooooooooooo well. Brilliant!!!

[Persephone]

Thank you!! I agree we all have that one person to remind us :)

[Ryan Zeller]

There are some interesting lines in here. I liked the first stanza -- in a way, that could exist on its own as a very short poem about the same topic. The ideas in the third stanza are interesting as well: I like the idea of an abuse victim questioning what power their abuser actually had. In a way, they give power to the abuser by accepting abuse. The questioning leads to change, which leads to healing.

The final two lines were very powerful. I'm glad you chose the word "breakable" rather than the cliche "unbreakable." I think your poem provides a most honest view of the topic. No matter what, we are all breakable, especially by those who we love.

Just one error to point out: "despise" is used incorrectly as an adjective in the second stanza.

[Persephone]

I agree, the victim first has to give up their own power to say "no" in order to become the abused. Thank you very much for the review!

[Pax]

wow, strong emotional poem. I wish you well. Life is indeed breakable but it is also bearable and can be fix.
great job on the poem

[Persephone]

Thanks for reading! :)

[Beautiful Brat]

Very visual with graceful words. Lovely! :]

[Persephone]

Thank you!

[Legion]

Lesson learned. You are a strong one. Bravo! Too many whine and can not move on. I understand their pain and fear, but life does not stop. I wish they would enjoy its beauty once again. Kudos. Not sure why it is labeled mature though.

[Persephone]

Thank you, I agree there are many whiners, but at some point we all have to pick ourselves up and move on :)