The Toy

The Toy

A Poem by Persephone

You are an ever lasting child and

I was your toy

 

For a moment I was fun, shiny, new, everything you wanted,

Hardly put down

 

But like a child your eye has wandered to other toys

I no longer have the appeal I once did

 

I am worn out, used, and forgotten on a shelf

To make room for the new shining toy that has caught your attention

 

Soon though, like all your toys, she too will know the despair

Of watching you enjoy yourself from the shelf

© 2012 Persephone


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You have vividly painted the playful boy who exploits girl-toys and switch over to newer ones.
It is like a throwing stones to the frogs.
The girls are frogs who are the target of boys.
Wonderful write.
But,I have little to help.
Girls intentionally become toys at the hand of boys.
They compete for the same boy and sacrifice everything they have.
Girls are enemies of girls.

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Persephone

12 Years Ago

Thank you for the review! I have to agree with you, some times the best of intentions can create the.. read more
zainul

12 Years Ago

You are very correct,sweet friend.
I am very annoyed with peculiar nature of some girls.
.. read more



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Nice metaphor... I like the way you worded things... :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Persephone

12 Years Ago

Thank you!
So much wrapped up in this short and well penned poem. This happens with so many relationships...it hurts to be discarded, but it is the loss of the perpetual child who will never know the beauty of the Velveteen Rabbit and long, committed love. You are the winner even through the pain. I am so proud of you.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Persephone

12 Years Ago

Very true - thanks for the thoughts :)
Shimmerbliss/CAF

12 Years Ago

:)
A good analogy of life...

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Persephone

12 Years Ago

Thanks Chris! Good thought, I appreciate it!
You nailed the problem.
I love your style. You appear to
write of life as we all know it,
The bad boy and the careless girl, but
you have seen it and out of this you
have produced beauty. I have tried to
follow the same thought process.
Produce better and better stories and
poems from life, that means that you have
become better and better at living .
Thank you,
----- John

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Persephone

12 Years Ago

What a beautiful review. I appreciate the thoughts and the reading, I get better at living with each.. read more
Eagle Cruagh

12 Years Ago

Not sure how to word this without seeming to over-do it, but
if you are new at writing, you s.. read more
Persephone

12 Years Ago

Thank you very much - I will think about that next time I pick up my pen :)
This spells out how many girls believe that they are special because the "perfect guy" has chosen them. Then, they take their place in a long line of discards. Frequently, this is the way women behave towards men, with a like result.
We all need to be needed yet we all need to learn what we should expect the limits of this treatment.....Good read. ph

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Persephone

12 Years Ago

It is a good reminder to know there are those limits :) Thanks for reading!
oh wow, i love this. so nicely written.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Persephone

12 Years Ago

Thank you!
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I love the metaphorical techniques you used in this piece. This is awesome. Great job :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Persephone

12 Years Ago

Thank you! :)
.

12 Years Ago

You are very welcomed :)
That sucks. Not the writing for that was superb and pinpoints this feeling in an extremely effective way, but the whole being used and discarded aspect. Know how that goes. Brilliant. Especially the last line. Top notch! Or should I say top shelf?

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Persephone

12 Years Ago

Thank you! Yes it is a feeling we all try to avoid, but seems to happen to many of us. Thanks again .. read more
You have vividly painted the playful boy who exploits girl-toys and switch over to newer ones.
It is like a throwing stones to the frogs.
The girls are frogs who are the target of boys.
Wonderful write.
But,I have little to help.
Girls intentionally become toys at the hand of boys.
They compete for the same boy and sacrifice everything they have.
Girls are enemies of girls.

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Persephone

12 Years Ago

Thank you for the review! I have to agree with you, some times the best of intentions can create the.. read more
zainul

12 Years Ago

You are very correct,sweet friend.
I am very annoyed with peculiar nature of some girls.
.. read more

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