You'd Have to Promise

You'd Have to Promise

A Poem by Katie Alexander
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Shaking hands and shadowed pavement.

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If you were mine,
you'd have to promise
to read my poetry.

You'd have to promise
to take in my dreams
and my pain,
laid out before you
while my hands shake, and
your eyes,
the green and brown hazel,
the tidal wave of bursting summer that is your eyes,
measure the meaning of my words.

And if you were mine,
you'd have to promise
not to talk about it.

Because the gentle dance
of crisp, red and yellow tears
drifting on the shadowed pavement
while we sit,
I, waiting for the moon
and you,
gentle fingertips grazing my letters,
is our moment.

You'd have to promise.

© 2015 Katie Alexander


Author's Note

Katie Alexander
This is my first(: An honest review would be really helpful.

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Beautiful imagery! I love this, I love the emotions conveyed and the descriptions, especially
"Because the gentle dance
of crisp, red and yellow tears
drifting on the shadowed pavement"
I thought that showed great imagery:)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Hey this is really awesome. Love between a boy and girl can be so wonderful and full of promises. Nicely done.

Posted 10 Years Ago


that was really great, it is in a great pattern :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


absolutely blown away by your talent. Thank you.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Katie Alexander

10 Years Ago

Oh my God, thank you
It's really good. My favorite line is "not to talk about it" and how you put the and on the end and continue on the next line with your eyes. It makes it so powerful. Great work!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Well God damn, I here on out promise to keep up with all you're writing. This piece was a-m-a-z-i-n-g. If only there was a girl out there who would want me to do this for her :''( *sob*sob*.... enough whining though and on to the real review. You're use of imagery here is f*****g wonderful. Describing your lover's eyes "crisp" "red" and "yellow" tears... nearly brought me to tears aha (sorry for the corny attempted joke) Anyways I give this a 9/10 and goes to show that you don't need a long or extensive piece of work to make a masterpiece.

Posted 10 Years Ago


This is just ...perfect..... thats all I have to say

Posted 10 Years Ago


Katie Alexander

10 Years Ago

That review means so much to me thank you(:
this is a great start... now just dont give up... find those things you held back and pour them out. another thing, forget being critical of your own work, though you will, just keep in mind to let it be.

Posted 10 Years Ago


A good one for a first...Bravo.....................

Posted 10 Years Ago


This was your first?! Wow..this was like amazing. I really loved this :) Keep up the good work, you definitely have a gift!

Posted 10 Years Ago



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Added on January 18, 2014
Last Updated on January 9, 2015
Tags: romance, possibilities, promise, promises, love, teenage, dreams, pain, eyes, summer, tears, moon, moment

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Katie Alexander
Katie Alexander

Kansas City, MO



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