hook

sipping from this mossy cup

how is it I'm intrigued?

the scales have proven balanced

but

without taxes

she sits comfortable from my brow

the dull hook aches from my lip

in a mixture of coppery red saliva

he who remains helpless

begins a courtship with unpredictability

Reviews

[0_o Abbie]

wow. This. Is. Awesome. I love this SO much. :D

[Everett DeValle]

Wow, excellent write...a lovely read.

[Cherrie Palmer]

This is dancing on the dark side, it has a simple rhyme that reveals a hidden truth that the reader has yet to find. It would be a good into to a short story.

Excellent writing style.
I like this.
Keep it up. ^.^

[Valentine]

This one sounds like a fishing tale..perhaps the one hooked and it got away..Val

[cfix]

I like this simply said and wonderful writing style. I love how you strted this piece out it's what caught my eye.