this week

just a lil weak piece

a stumbled crawl

gathering dusty mud in pockets

low

low

my armor has rusted

who am I to bring forth this mallet?

cursed by shallow emotion

her voice is but an ache away

yet

I cannot call out

the wind carries cool hankerchiefs

pressing the sadness into my eyes

know this though

I have been hollow for some time

Reviews

[Moonflower]

The last stanza won me over, very good.

[Tyler Allen]

Harrowing account of sadness and emptiness. This is wonderful.
a stumbled crawl

gathering dusty mud in pockets
low
low
my armor has rusted

My favorite part.
And when you say:
Pressing the sadness into my eyes
I have been hollow for some time

Captures the utter agony
of feeling insignificant
Very well done

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

Very original..especially the line 'wind carries cool hankerchiefs pressing the sadness into my eyes'..

[GBU POETRY ONLY]

A downtrodden knight with rusty armor of the soul ... That's a heavy load to carry. Guess we all can feel broken and hollow. I hope you don't have "this week" often ...
This piece is loaded with sorrow & sentiment.. The last stanza is wondrous and full of powerful imagery ... You've weaken the knees, Periac ...
GBU

[jenniewren (J.W. Bouwma..]

goddamn this is heartbreaking.. lyrical and beautiful, as you do best. but.. so sad..

[deeps]

who am I to bring forth this mallet?
cursed by shallow emotion
her voice is but an ache away
yet
I cannot call out

I really like this stanza here,
this is an amazing write, full of feelings.