pastel

demo song

entwined

like candles melted together

sunshine

like apples growing forever

with eyes pasteled
scribbled sorrow we fell
onto a comforted bed

"is this what you wanted?"

she said

Reviews

[Cardinal Robin]

Awwwww, Two lovely ladies...(hey Ladies! G G G G G Get Funky!, BB) got here before me...
This is, as our so far suggests, a rare quality of poetry you have, in this brevity and Lovingly!
I liked it like a single blade of grass held by the sixth Patriarch to a speechless crowd.
It is as Zen, you had Zen film in yer camera and the snapshot of love you have here...Zen beautiful...the love is tangible and hopeful, and brutally honest...Super work!

[Dorchadas]

Really beautiful Periac... I love how it flows off the tongue with it's own rhythm.
The imagery is amazing and heartfelt. I love where this took me. Simple, clever and beautiful.

[Lalli]

entwined like candles melted together.... genius!

this poem is creative, and it really brings out vivid imagery and emotion.
the ending was perfect.
is this what you wanted she said.

powerful!

much love n respect

-Lalli

[lauren emily]

Short and sweet. Great job!

[Dani California]

This is awesome! Truly it is.
It flows right of the tongue..

"is this what you wanted?"

she said

.. those lines made this piece have impact, and changed its direction completely.

Short and perfect!

[Seriana]

Periac!!!!!!! I love this. Simple and beautiful. Your subtle rhyme, I can hear it sung almost. Lovely, as always!