afterwards

there once was a secret shore

hidden in a cave of stone where

water empties itself-

 

he began an expedition

destroying and defiling

everything.

dynamite tearing down

walls and caves and

all the little places we build

inside ourselves.

 

systematically

he pulled the wings off the fly

and exposed my cave.

 

an excavation team

made short work of it:

plundered and forgotten,

the promise of beauty

impaled by slats of wood

holding up empty tunnels.

Author's Note

All polite/relevant reviews are welcome - especially constructive critique, but also including grammar and spelling corrections, although please bear in mind that the (lack of) capitalisation in this piece is intentional. And thank you for reading/leaving a review!

Reviews

[asdarkeyesclose]

loved all the possibilities of that opening, sad that the cave was discovered and plundered. lots to enjoy in this :)

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i really like the 2nd stanza, Such a deep powerful write. I don't know much about critique reviewing, but i enjoyed this write.