Not You

It's a sonnet about someone who broke your heart and is trying to come back. Yet, he is someone who is not meant for you because you're already in love with someone else.

I loved you but I was terribly hurt;
Trying to believe that it's not too late.
Was always missing you for we're apart,
Till I realized I felt so much hate.
Here in my heart, you have 
caused so much pain.
I cried non-stop and didn't want to live;
Hid each drop of my tears under the rain.
You talked to me but I didn't believe. 
Will never deny that I have loved you;
And now I think that everything is fake.
Thought you would prove that your love is true,
Yet you gave me nothing but plain heartache.
I know that I have already moved on.
And will give my heart to someone else soon.

Reviews

[Lisasview]

Hi Gladys,
Thought I would review one of your delightful poems.
So, trying a sonnet.. good for you.
10 syllables per line... right... so the line
"Thought that you would prove that your love is true" seems to only have 9 syllables.. please correct me if I am wrong...
Also, line 5 and 6 should be on one line..
and, you might want to think about separating line 4 from line 5 and 8 from line 9, so that there are actual verses..4 lines per verse and just two lines at the end...I counted you lines and I think you have one extra..
Just thought I would share a tiny bit of what I know...and I am certainly no expert.. but I so like your poem that I thought just a tiny bit of tweaking would make it stronger.
Probably none of my business...
lisa, now in Spain

[gladys aily]

Hi, Lisa!! Apology for the very late reply, anyway, better late than never! I appreciate your suggestions and will keep it in mind.

Have a great day!! :)

[Lisasview]

Yes, getting feed back regarding edits can often be so useful Gladys.
My suggestion is that you really check on what I suggested.. Would love to read your corrected poem.
Lisa

[brian]

Yes! This captures heartache and that initial pain we feel wonderfully. I've been through this last year. A poetry topic everyone should read!

[gladys aily]

Thanks for your comment brian! I'll post my other poem next time entitled Broken Pieces. ☺