when i walk with you

when i walk with you

A Poem by peaches
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a poem talking about being in love .

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When i walk with you i am the most happiest person in the world i fell so great when you are by my side , you are the world to me and you are the best guy in the world, i fell so great when i walk with you.

© 2010 peaches


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its so short hunny child(: i love you bestie. good job though(:

Posted 14 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was cute, i would try putting everything in the center though, so it'll look more like a poem. Also as Coyote poetry said, Capitilize ur "I"s. But don't worry, i sometimes forget to do that6 too. :P

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 5 people found this review constructive.

Break the lines up and cap the I''s and this poem will be perfect. Emotion and love are in your words. Always put yourself in the reader position. Make it easy to read. You have talent. Keep writing your beautiful poems.
Coyote

Posted 14 Years Ago


0 of 5 people found this review constructive.

sound like someone in love but let me get things to the point it good it awsome i know the feeling 2 but very good like how u put the person as ur everything

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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peaches

spalding, GA



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