The Final Break Up Story

....based on true events ;)

Oh, how dare you laugh at my face,

when I'm about to throw you out?

Kick your clothes out of the window, embrace

the lack of stinking socks around.

 

The plan seemed so ferocious yesterday,

And I was buzzing like a power plant. To be honest

I pictured you covered in tears and clay,

and homeless, or at least, wearing a ripped vest.

 

But here you are now, eating my pizza

Hawaiian, and instead of packing, I only hear gulping.

At the breaking point, like the tower in Pisa

I am. I hope you choke on your smirking.

 

So I flush the ring down the toilet, follows the bag

of good laugh. You die inside. Oh! Excuse me

isn't this how you've imagined the hag?

Now go, before, like the last time, we agree to disagree.

 

 

 

Reviews

[Joshua Carl Cruz]

Bada bip bada boom. I dont know if many can appreciate the way this poem throws it's weight around, tossing the eye and the brain like a washing machine on spin dry. As my understanding of exactly how insensitive we can be grew so did laughter. I love the way the poem interspliced my hate for this man and my own past failures of similar colour, along with lessons being handed down from the high road in humorous fashion, this is the goods people.

[paulina misiewicz]

hahhaha thanks Josh, appreciate! as always, your reviews don't disappoint!

[Abhigyan]

REMINDS ME OF SOMEONE FAR......................BTW, ITS COOL.......AND YES AMIDST FUN, THERES DEEP HURT...
GOOD GOING:-)

[Nightfeather]

This poem shows that love can be a double edged sword. It is not only rainbows and sunshine, for were there is light there also is darkness but love is a burden that we must carry in live. The weight can be overwhelming for some (breaking up, or being rejected) but one should just lose its weight. For we humans can choose the amounts of love. I like your poem.

Good job :D

[paulina misiewicz]

Wise words. Thank you Nightfeather for your review!

[Nightfeather]

No problem :)

[andrew mitchell]

A clever poem I'm in two minds, one you are talking to yourself about the breakup and look what you've done and the other is about your ex coming back, not going and you are in turmoil

[paulina misiewicz]

Thanks Andrew for taking the time to read and comment! Exactly right, a vicious circle/ turmoil that becames toxic