scratch

scratching my way up out of 

oblivion

the sky's that we're

living in

the sea's

getting rough

again.

Reviews

[MoriartyMesa]

Nice flow of quotation.

[theludus]

I like this one because it's sort of like the spirit is amid the clouds and the skies are the oceans, it points toward utter chaos and the spirit' grappling. to me that's good imagery and placement. It's a bit dry and optimistic to say that the weather is always beautiful above the clouds. I have flown, it's lovely up there, this poem is kind of magical then, the way the imagery lands you/us amid that turmoil.

[Emily B]

the sea's getting rough and the weather is sideways

but we'll get through it

just like we always do

[Dove]

eah line has its own picture, really cool. you're a wonderful writer

[asdarkeyesclose]

each line with its very seperate image. i liked the simplicity of expression. Stunning :)

[...]

. i wonder if there's a way out of oblivion, coach ...
. i really wonder ...

[Robin]

up out in and again .

[Dani]

sky full of sea full of nothing full of me.

I've missed your writing.

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

It's all rough, but it beats the Hell out of oblivion.
Nice write.

[arbitrary jane]

damn straight.
also.. this reads like a really good lyric. nice.