beg

the sleeping sea

begins to wake

waves to give

waves to take

nervous little sandgrains

beg for mercy

Reviews

[Mo'Kha]

This I love...bite sized genius!

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

Nice! From slack tide to high tide, the sand has to take it!

[...]

It's quite something to be able to write about begging for mercy, and "nervous little sandgrains" is what it makes of us when we do. Some of us are only made of sandgrains but maybe the sleeping seas are at sea.

[Emily Rae]

I'm loving your style. you have so much to convey in so little words--powerful.

[Siddhartha]

Oh, the brilliance!

[Angela]

I was just at the sea and this tickled my mind. Loved the ending. Brilliant.

[Elizabeth]

The last two lines... love. I giggled. And then, I thought it might also be a little sad. Because it is, if you really think about it.

[piggy]

wonderful imagination used here.

you have a way with words, keep up the good work.
all the best

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

delicate delectable quiver in my soul~soles =)~

[Emily B]

if I were a sandgrain . . . ah, the magic of a word