alone
A Poem by
paul
alone I stare
into the void
everywhere
matter drips
my breathing counts
time
infinity slips
headlong into the void
like a grain of sand
I sit
against the shore
or a planet
in a universe
empty
and full
waves wash
over me
like a grain of sand
or a nighttime
alone
© 2011 paul
Reviews
These images are absolute.
They are intense and profound.
To be a grain of sand is to experience
isolation in its minutest manifestation.
It is humbling to read your poetry, Paul.
Posted 13 Years Ago
Much to consider here. Alone is a good thing sometimes, as long as my mind doesn't get too carried away.
Groovy writing.
Posted 13 Years Ago
Much to consider here. Alone is a good thing sometimes, as long as my mind doesn't get too carried away.
Groovy writing.
the music of alone is so damn loud ...
Posted 13 Years Ago
the music of alone is so damn loud ...
matter drips reminded me of a cave or something.
you know, the dripping of the planet onto the planet. very scientific
but the rest of the poem was like the waves of the ocean, in and out
Posted 13 Years Ago
matter drips reminded me of a cave or something.
you know, the dripping of the planet onto the planet. very scientific
but the rest of the poem was like the waves of the ocean, in and out
This is my favorite by far. It's like the completion of your other thoughts... another reviewer said something to that effect, and it's true. "Infinity slips... like a grain of sand I sit..." I feel the weight of that. Perfect, as always. Perfect and tender and lonely.
Posted 13 Years Ago
This is my favorite by far. It's like the completion of your other thoughts... another reviewer said something to that effect, and it's true. "Infinity slips... like a grain of sand I sit..." I feel the weight of that. Perfect, as always. Perfect and tender and lonely.
"my breathing counts
time"
but I doubt you count your breathing.
time truly is insignificant.
brilliant piece.
Posted 13 Years Ago
"my breathing counts
time"
but I doubt you count your breathing.
time truly is insignificant.
brilliant piece.
It is like you were building upto this one poem..one extended moments with all other poems of yours.This is just amazing..
Posted 13 Years Ago
It is like you were building upto this one poem..one extended moments with all other poems of yours.This is just amazing..
you've mastered the theme
Posted 13 Years Ago
you've mastered the theme
the moment you let these words loose into the Universe, you instantly found a friend, alone is a state of mind sometimes
you are found
Posted 13 Years Ago
the moment you let these words loose into the Universe, you instantly found a friend, alone is a state of mind sometimes
you are found
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