alone

alone

A Poem by paul

alone I stare
into the void
everywhere

matter drips

my breathing counts
time

infinity slips

headlong into the void

like a grain of sand
I sit

against the shore

or a planet
in  a universe

empty
and full

waves wash
over me

like a grain of sand
or a nighttime
alone

© 2011 paul


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These images are absolute.
They are intense and profound.
To be a grain of sand is to experience
isolation in its minutest manifestation.
It is humbling to read your poetry, Paul.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Much to consider here. Alone is a good thing sometimes, as long as my mind doesn't get too carried away.

Groovy writing.

Posted 13 Years Ago


the music of alone is so damn loud ...

Posted 13 Years Ago


matter drips reminded me of a cave or something.
you know, the dripping of the planet onto the planet. very scientific

but the rest of the poem was like the waves of the ocean, in and out

Posted 13 Years Ago


This is my favorite by far. It's like the completion of your other thoughts... another reviewer said something to that effect, and it's true. "Infinity slips... like a grain of sand I sit..." I feel the weight of that. Perfect, as always. Perfect and tender and lonely.

Posted 13 Years Ago


"my breathing counts
time"

but I doubt you count your breathing.
time truly is insignificant.

brilliant piece.

Posted 13 Years Ago


It is like you were building upto this one poem..one extended moments with all other poems of yours.This is just amazing..

Posted 13 Years Ago


you've mastered the theme

Posted 13 Years Ago


the moment you let these words loose into the Universe, you instantly found a friend, alone is a state of mind sometimes

you are found

Posted 13 Years Ago



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