what secrets

what secrets

A Poem by paul

what secrets
do the buildings hide

what do they do?
when noones looking


how they grow
inch by inch 

in silence.

© 2011 paul


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. ah, what an in depth poetic expression of height and depth ... how do you do this ? ... how can you say it in such few words ... oh how, oh how, oh how ... we are like buildings ... we immerse ourselves in our own pain when no one's looking ... and then we start becoming taller and taller ... (am still stumped by how you wrote about something we've all noticed - the feeling of buildings seeming taller) ... the salient feature of buildings is being silent ... and it's not that no one's looking ... everyone's looking for something ... but, unlike you, they don't notice the most imposing structure around them ... buildings, yes, buildings, we don't even notice them ... not until you show us ... awesome work, coach ...

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Ah!..love this one paul..

Posted 13 Years Ago


a quiet thought for a pensive day.

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if walls could speak..what secrets indeed would they speak of..enchanting.

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brilliant.

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i always like this intrigued questing voice of yours...nice,neat,little

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very strong symbolism in this piece ..

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- oh so incredibly beautiful!! - i'm sure if the rest of us - had eyes that could see what they do - when no one's looking - we'd see little pencil marks in the skies - that would tell us - how they grew inch by inch - in silence - but we're too busy not looking perhaps - just because we think we see everyday - we stop seeing, perhaps - i'll keep my eyes open - i'll try and etch and celebrate - the little steps of growth - i will! - thank you - for this lesson! - you're absolutely amazingly profound! - :) -

Posted 13 Years Ago


Ohhhh... I wish I wish I only wish I could write like this..Honestly :-) Swooning madly at your lines..how they grow inch by inch...in silence..I'm finished :-|

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Love it! Buildings are just misunderstood.

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hmm indeed! what do they do when no one's looking - what does anyone do when no one's looking? - the growing in silence has such an ominous effect (whether intended or not) - suspicious almost as buildings climb to tower us still! nice! a favourite!

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