outhere again

outhere in the nighttime

lights are mocked

by darkness

infinities chase

their own tail

thoughts invade

clear sky

and that old hudson river

shimmers

reflecting new york city

like a liquid mirror

thoughts invade  

clear sky

like ships 

on the ocean

an ocean

full of ships

skies invade 

empty space

like nighttime

and day

Reviews

[.]

. oh, amazing ... when you write ... the universe reveals itself to you ... you etch with precision ... in the perfect of hues ... these thoughts enter our minds ... and doubts persist persistently ... it is hard to focus ... when darkness drains vehemently ... it mocks and it stains and it stinks too ... doubts are dubious and a threat for me and you ... infinities and spaces cause epic mayhems ... the snowfalls in NYC ... who can blame them ... stillness is rare and so is 'invisible' ... madness is bare and sanity is divisible ... oh, how you inspire, paul ... how you reveal ... how you teach ... and how you state ... for me, you personify profundity and always will ...

[Narnie]

Love the 'shimmer''mirror' play on rhyme and meaning. This was one I read a few times yesterday too. I wondered whether the gap between river and shimmer was necessary but I reckon its got a reason that I'm just not seeing yet. Thank you so much for your comments on my work. I don't get around too many people in this place and it is lovely to read work of such quality as yours.

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

Unusual..marvellous..this couldn't have been better..you have condensed a myriad into such beautiful simplicity that it is amazing...amazing.

[vivekanand]

these words invade the mundane and go into the wordless... skies invade empty space..it is as if everything is brought down

[Isolophobe]

Incredible and nothing less than such. This could condense a social psychology textbook into just a few pages. All you need to know about a society and its bewilderment is here, euphemistically expressed in a way that only warrants marveling.

[.]

"like ships
on the ocean

an ocean
full of ships

skies invade
empty space

like nighttime
and day"

~u have really expressed a beautiful emotion
in great depth with this poem...impressive"

:)

[em]

- wow - again - wow - infinite profundity - abundant in every line - serah's so right - every syllable echoes - the rain would surrender - its inevitable fall - to its never ending pursuit - of the sky - and the sky would relent - trade its vastness - for a drop of heaven - in your words -
- from my tiny corner in the world - i see - and believe - and witness - and experience - the wonder and the sandness - the magic and the tragedies - the beauty and the serenity - of imagaes innumerable - and of moments between moments - through the mesmerizing mirror of your words - thank you - ever so much - for being profundity personified -

[Lilly Negoi]

i finished reading and these:
"infinities chase
their own tail"
keep echoing inside my mind :). great expression!