careful

you've got to be careful

of the street

like the moon is careful

of the sun

you have got to nighttime like the day

holding on

Reviews

[em]

- you have really got to be careful - especially - if you carry - the most sparkling treasure - of exquisite poetry - in your arms - those streets are often unforgiving - just like the sun - plus - serah will login later and tell you how astonished she is with your genius - and agree with me - i agree with her too - you are a genius, mister master!!! -

- plus - there isn't a better voice in the whole wide world - to speak with - at 3:47 AM (Indian standard time) - and - serah and i - as unusual as it is - agree -

[deeps]

I like this write, thought it was interesting and intriguing.

[.]

this is an ingenious poem-( love the last line)
it really completed the poem...;)

:)

[.]

. yeah ... brilliant title ... brilliantly justified ... what an etching in words ... of the significance of space and the respect we must have for it ... even if it's infinite ... like the sun and the moon ... you are by far one of the most profoundly perceptive poets i have ever read ... and oh, if i could hear this in that dazzling voice of yours ... i would be even more overwhelmed ... em said it ... you are a genius, mister ...

[Dani]

this says more in what it does not say.
I don't hesitate when I say that this is beautiful.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

intricate perceptions~

[Robin]

senses aware ~ like feeling unseen eyes in the shadows

[TAO]

There's always good reason to be careful in the street. Never know who's not paying attention, or who has their eye on whatever it is you're carrying with you. Yep, definitely well said.