last

the night at nighttime

sings songs the day would

never understand

the poet runs out of words

like a fish 

on land

little human lights try

and fail

lonely little clouds don't last

Reviews

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. let this poet be submerged in water ... in waves of words that cause ripples ... let lands not last ... let songs be understood ... let lonely little clouds float by ... in a clear blue sky ... let human lights not fail ... let words never be pale ... let poetry be ... let the poet smile ... let words whisper ... along the nile ...

[poetic soul]

the scattered emotion in the piece made sense with the last line coming up! it made a disturbed but a good read, my friend...

keep writing and sharing! :)

[em]

- ah - first your poem - and then serah's in your review - i couldn't stop smiling if i tried!! - and i'm not even going to!! -

from this edge to that
and for all the in-betweens
let light lie in verse

- yeah - sheer genius you are - and a magician incomparable!!! -

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

Poets do always run out of words :p..
and as the clouds nothing ever lasts..

[jenniewren (J.W. Bouwma..]

this is an example of purity in poetic form.. moving and succinctly magic

[Dani]

the reader ran out of words
like a fish
on land.

speechless, really.
beautiful poem.

[Robin]

I like how you bring the emotion in this poem down , the first stanza an alliterative gem

[Lilly Negoi]

you know what's strange? i've read this poem a few times already, and it happens again and again: the word "little" remains glued to my memory. it spices this text with sorrow, and need for caring, and a bit of teasing, and a lot of things. at least this is what it makes me feel like. :)

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

intricate patterns of thought like fireflies teasing just out of reach of vision~ subtle~ beautifully so~