molecules

madness in the molecules

writing like gambling

each word brings

promise and fear

like each breath

each turn

of the dice.

Reviews

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. ohhhhh ... the risks we take ... with "each breath" and "each turn of the dice" ... but you don't take any risks with writing ... i beg to disagree ... because when you write ... there is no gambling ... depth is the symptom of your poetry ... brevity bows to your incisive thoughts ... these forays into the realms of existentialism ... transcend the minor gambles that we smaller writers attempt to win ... this is a winning poem ... solid and substantial ... like a stone mural with nothing but beauty depicted on it ... the beauty of how we ... as humans ... negotiate uncertainties in life ... beautiful, just beautiful ...

[Geralyn Miller]

I understand the fear, you are gambling that the reader will understand what you meant. And hoping

[Dani]

the last three lines have me cornered. I give in! I love them to death.

[ttttt]

It has an icy edge to it that is well cool. Love the beatnik vibe. I think this should definitely be elaborated... I feel like theres a lot of meaning under the surface that could be beautifully exposed through this short poem.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

supremely creative on every level~

[Brad]

so few words spoke volumes of information...you told it like it is with a good little b***h slap in there for good measure

[Robin]

living on edge ~

[em]

- i agree with serah!! - poetry of this quality - from a poet of your caliber - that's no risk at all!! -
- i am always blown away by just how many shades your poetry evokes - and in such few words!! - there are just so many moments - we let remain trapped in fear - truth is - once the dice is cast - it is - and then - the only place to go - is the next step!! -

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

This is one of your most beautiful works.It reflects how so much can be portrayed in simply a few words.Each word indeed has much value in a poet's eye like a jeweler values each stone he embeds in a jewel.

[TAO]

molecules are mad, aren't they? I know that feeling too well, gambling... bleh. Great job.