smow

when the days nighttime

and the nighttimes day

everyone remembers

to stay away

pristine loneliness

pristine alone

noone wants to make tracks

in my cold snow

Reviews

[...]

. i smow agree with you, you brilliant mind and brilliant s(m)oul ...

he's there
he's there
somewhere out there
but he won't make tracks
in my warm glow

so my night times the day
and my day times the night
and i keep wondering
where he is
and if he is alright

[emmah]

a soaring heart
will knock on your window
untamed miles will
make tracks in your snow

when the days stay
and the night time screams
your melancholy song
will weave delicate dreams

and just like that - paul - with a title that is an invention - you paint a gray snowy day - only you can unleash this magic - and make me wonder - yet again - how exactly you do this!!!

[nono]

Smow? Okay whatever it's your poem, but just to make sure I'm not crazy did you accidentally hit the m? lol I like this it's beautiful and makes me see everything in a poem that's not very long. Nicely done!

[Brad]

if you were desperate...and needed a friend...i'd shovel my way to you, bro...this po was excellent...hit the emotional button on me

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

delicate~ fragile impression of heart pressed between the chambers of being~ gorgeous word streaming~

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

You write with such tenderness..your heart almost weeps the words you say.

[Wondering Mind]

Very unique style and an original way of expressing a state of lone-some-ness. Thank you for sharing.

[Ed Hart]

you say this, but it's not true

[Isolophobe]

d****t, this is pure. this is poetry. what a great image and idea. loneliness is far too often overdone in one way or another. ahhh, but not too often like this. i loved this.

[alan peter kelly]

i was wondering if you meant "snow" :) i was thinking that this one would be humorous lol...you capture isolated introspection so perfectly here Paul...i am always amazed at how often..so few words can relate so much...and in this case the "so much" is a sweeping internal geography with images representing the external world...and...i know this feeling oh so well...(trudges away away into his own cold smow...) :) love it...